Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the information on the numbers of competitors of varied activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
In 2000, Film club was most popular activity started with 65 participants and gradually decrease in the middle of the c;laases but by the end of the period marginally showed by 65 participants. While Martial arts started with 45 competitors but they fluctuated over the period. Ameteur dramatics started with 25 competitors and steadily rose in 2005 by 30 members but from 2005 to 2020 participants was dramactically dropped by 10.
Table tennis showed up with 15 contestants in the beginning of the class. From 2005 to 2010 they stopped at the same level of participants. From 2010 substantially grew by 55 participants by the end of the period. Musical performances started with zero member in 2000 to 2005. In 2010 tey showed 10 participants then they modestly increase by the end of the period by 15 participants.
Overall, Film club showed most popular activity over the period. While Martial arts fluctuated and Amateur dramatics showed incresed and decreased in the entire period. On the other hand, Table tennis started with smalll amount of participants but end up with large number of participants. Finally, Muscial performances showed up with zero member in the beginning, while end with some members.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main trends for each activity. However, the reporting of data is occasionally inaccurate or confusing. For example, stating that the Film club 'gradually decrease' and then 'marginally showed by 65' is unclear and mathematically imprecise. Similarly, the description of Amateur dramatics dropping by 10 is not clearly supported by the graph's trajectory. While the overview captures the general movement of the activities, the lack of precision in data reporting and some misinterpretations of the trends prevent this from reaching a higher band. The response would benefit from a more careful selection of key data points to support the comparisons made.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'Table tennis showed up' and 'Musical performances started with zero member' are awkward and disrupt the flow. The progression of ideas within paragraphs is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the second and third paragraphs where the transition between different activities feels abrupt. While there is an overall attempt at a logical structure, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the repetitive sentence starters limit the coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher score. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'competitors of varied activities' instead of 'participants in various activities' and 'showed up' instead of 'commenced' or 'recorded'. Spelling errors are also present, such as 'c;laases', 'dramactically', 'incresed', 'smalll', and 'Muscial'. These errors, while not always impeding communication, are frequent enough to suggest a limited range of vocabulary and a lack of control over word formation and spelling.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures. While there are attempts at complex sentences, they are often marred by grammatical errors, such as 'Film club was most popular activity started with 65 participants' (missing articles and relative pronouns) and 'participants was dramactically dropped' (subject-verb agreement error). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary semicolons and missing commas. The frequency of these errors, particularly with verb tenses and articles, indicates that the writer has not yet mastered complex structures, and the errors are noticeable throughout the text.
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