Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graph illustrates the information on the number of competitors of varied activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
In 2000, Film club was the most popular activity started with 65 participants and gradually decreased in the middle of the classes but by the end of the period marginally showed by 65 participants. While Martial arts started with 45 competitors but they fluctuated over the period. Ameateur dramatics started with 25 competitors and steadily rose in 2005 by 30 members but from 2005 to 2020 participants dropped dramatically by 10.
Table tennis showed up with 15 contestants in the beginning of the class. From 2005 to 2010 they stopped at the same level of participants. From 2010 substantially grew by 55 participants by the end of the period. Musical performances started with zero member in 2000 to 2005. In 2010 they showed 10 participants then they modestly increased by the end of the period by 15 participants.
Overall, Film club showed most popular activity over the period. While Martial arts fluctuated and Amateur dramatics showed increases and decreased in the entire period. On the other hand, Table tennis started with a small number of participants but end up with large number of participants. Finally, Musical performances showed up with zero member in the beginning, while end with some members.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all parts of the task and identifies key trends for each activity. However, the reporting of data is occasionally inaccurate or confusing. For example, stating the Film club 'marginally showed by 65 participants' is unclear, and the description of the Amateur dramatics drop as 'by 10' does not align well with the graph's visual data. While the main features are highlighted, the analysis lacks precision in comparing the activities effectively. To improve, ensure that data points are described with more clarity and that comparisons between categories are more explicit rather than just listing them individually.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs for specific activities, and an overview. Cohesive devices such as 'In 2000', 'While', 'From 2005 to 2010', and 'Overall' are used to guide the reader. However, some transitions are mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'Table tennis showed up' and 'Musical performances showed up'. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the internal structure of the body paragraphs could be improved by grouping related trends more effectively rather than treating each activity in isolation.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks sophistication. There is some repetition of basic verbs like 'started', 'showed', and 'increased'. Some word choices are unnatural or imprecise, such as 'competitors of varied activities' (participants in activities is better) and 'showed up' (which is informal). The use of 'substantially grew' is a good attempt at collocation, but overall, the vocabulary remains at a functional level. To reach a higher band, incorporate more varied reporting verbs and precise nouns related to data trends.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow, such as 'Film club was the most popular activity started with 65 participants' (missing relative pronoun 'which started') and 'zero member' (should be plural 'members'). The phrase 'marginally showed by 65 participants' is grammatically confusing. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the frequency of these minor errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct prepositional usage would significantly improve the accuracy.
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