Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graph illustrates the information on the number of competitors of varied activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
In 2000, the Film club was the most popular activity started with 65 participants and gradually decreased in the middle of the classes but by the end of the period marginally showed by 65 participants. While Martial arts started with 45 competitors they fluctuated over the period. Amateur dramatics started with 25 competitors and steadily rose in 2005 by 30 members but from 2005 to 2020 participants dropped dramatically by 10.
Table tennis showed up with 15 contestants in the beginning of the class. From 2005 to 2010 they stopped at the same level of participants. From 2010 substantially grew by 55 participants by the end of the period. Musical performances started with zero members in 2000 to 2005. In 2010 they showed 10 participants then they modestly increased by the end of the period by 15 participants.
Overall, the Film club showed the most popular activity over the period. While Martial arts fluctuated and Amateur dramatics showed increases and decreases in the entire period. On the other hand, Table tennis started with a small number of participants but ended up with a large number of participants. Finally, Musical performances showed up with zero members in the beginning, while ended with some members.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all parts of the task and identifies key trends for each activity. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical, focusing on listing data points rather than synthesising information. For example, the description of the Film club is slightly confusing, stating it 'gradually decreased' but then 'marginally showed by 65', which is unclear. While the main features are highlighted, the comparison between categories could be more sophisticated. The overview is present but could be more effectively integrated to highlight the most significant trends, such as the dramatic growth of Table tennis compared to the decline of others.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs for specific data, and an overview. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'In 2000', 'While', and 'Overall', which help guide the reader. However, some transitions are repetitive or slightly awkward, such as 'Table tennis showed up' and 'Musical performances showed up'. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the internal structure of the body paragraphs could be improved to ensure smoother flow between the data points mentioned.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task, but it lacks precision and variety. Phrases like 'showed up' and 'showed by' are used repeatedly and are not ideal for describing graph trends. There are some inaccuracies in collocation, such as 'competitors of varied activities' (participants in activities) and 'stopped at the same level' (remained stable). To reach a higher band, you should use more precise terminology for trends, such as 'plateaued', 'surged', or 'experienced a downward trend'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'started with 65 participants and gradually decreased... but by the end of the period marginally showed by 65 participants' (the verb usage is unclear here). There are also issues with prepositions and tense consistency, such as 'in the beginning of the class' instead of 'at the beginning'. Despite these errors, the communication is not significantly impeded.
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