Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The line graph illustrates the information on the number of competitors of varied activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

In 2000, the Film club was the most popular activity starting with 65 participants and gradually decreased in the middle of the classes but by the end of the period marginally recovered by 65 participants. While Martial arts started with 45 competitors they fluctuated over the period. Amateur dramatics started with 25 competitors and steadily rose in 2005 to 30 members but from 2005 to 2020 participants dropped dramatically by 10.

Table tennis showed up with 15 contestants in the beginning of the class. From 2005 to 2010 they stopped at the same level of participants. From 2010 it substantially grew by 55 participants by the end of the period. Musical performances started with zero members in 2000 to 2005. In 2010 they showed 10 participants then they modestly increased by the end of the period by 15 participants.

Overall, the Film club showed the most popular activity over the period. While Martial arts fluctuated and Amateur dramatics showed increases and decreases in the entire period. On the other hand, Table tennis started with a small number of participants but ended up with a large number of participants. Finally, Musical performances showed up with zero members in the beginning, while ended with some members.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main trends and provided a clear overview. You covered all categories and made relevant comparisons. However, there are some inaccuracies in data reporting. For example, you stated the Film club 'marginally recovered by 65 participants' at the end, but the graph shows it ended at 65, not that it increased by that amount. Similarly, your description of Table tennis growth is slightly confusing regarding the specific figures. To reach a higher band, ensure that the data points are interpreted precisely and that the 'main features' are highlighted more distinctly in the overview rather than just listing data in the body paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organised into clear paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs for specific data, and an overall summary. You use some cohesive devices such as 'While', 'On the other hand', and 'Finally' to link ideas. However, the progression within paragraphs is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally repetitive (e.g., repeating 'participants' frequently). The use of linking words is generally effective, but the flow could be improved by varying the sentence structure to connect the data points more fluidly rather than listing them one by one.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'competitors', 'fluctuated', 'steadily rose', and 'substantially grew'. There are some minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'showed up with' (which is informal) and 'in the beginning of the class' (the graph refers to a social centre, not a single class). While you attempt to use some less common vocabulary, the phrasing is occasionally slightly unnatural. Expanding your range of reporting verbs and nouns would help improve the precision of your descriptions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are some grammatical errors, such as 'Film club was the most popular activity starting with 65 participants and gradually decreased in the middle of the classes but by the end of the period marginally recovered by 65 participants', which is structurally awkward and factually confusing. Another example is 'Musical performances started with zero members in 2000 to 2005', which is slightly imprecise. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and clearer prepositional usage.

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