Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The line graph illustrates the information on the number of participants of various activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
In 2000, the Film club was the most popular activity starting with 65 participants and gradually decreased in the middle of the period but by the end of the period marginally recovered to 65 participants. While Martial arts started with 45 participants they fluctuated over the period. Amateur dramatics started with 25 participants and steadily rose in 2005 to 30 members but from 2005 to 2020 participants dropped dramatically by 10.
Table tennis showed up with 15 contestants in the beginning of the class. From 2005 to 2010 they stopped at the same level of participants. From 2010 it substantially grew by 55 participants by the end of the period. Musical performances started with zero members in 2000 to 2005. In 2010 they showed 10 participants then they modestly increased by the end of the period by 15 participants.
Overall, the Film club showed the most popular activity over the period. While Martial arts fluctuated and Amateur dramatics showed increases and decreases in the entire period. On the other hand, Table tennis started with a small number of participants but ended up with a large number of participants. Finally, Musical performances showed up with zero members in the beginning, while ended with some members.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for all five activities. You have successfully identified the main trends, such as the popularity of the Film club and the significant growth of Table tennis. However, the analysis is slightly mechanical in places. For example, stating that Amateur dramatics 'dropped dramatically by 10' is a bit contradictory, as 10 is a relatively small numerical change. To reach a higher band, ensure that your descriptions of trends (e.g., 'dramatically', 'substantially') accurately reflect the scale of the data provided in the graph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for specific activities, and an overview. The use of cohesive devices like 'While', 'On the other hand', and 'Finally' helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. However, the transition between sentences within paragraphs is sometimes a bit repetitive, and the referencing could be smoother. For instance, the phrase 'they stopped at the same level' is slightly ambiguous. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring clear pronoun references would enhance the flow of the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly, using terms like 'fluctuated', 'marginally recovered', and 'modestly increased'. There are some minor issues with word choice, such as 'showed up with 15 contestants' and 'the beginning of the class', which sound slightly unnatural in an academic report context. To improve, focus on using more precise reporting verbs and nouns related to data analysis, such as 'commenced', 'figures', or 'participation levels', rather than informal phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical slips, such as 'the number of participants of various activities' (should be 'in'), and 'ended with some members' (which is vague). There are also minor punctuation and preposition errors throughout. To achieve a higher band, aim for more error-free complex sentences and ensure that your subject-verb agreement and preposition usage are consistently accurate.
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