Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The graph illustrates the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Overall, film club recorded the highest number of participants over the year. While amateur dramatics activities scored lowest participants . Martial arts show the fluctuated numbers of participants. Sudden increased happen in table tennis participants.
In detail, musical performances start in 2005 and rose to 10 number of participants, While it slightly went up and maintain the same level for till next 2020 .
In table tennis the number of participants were near 20 in 2000, then it minimally up and down was show for next ten year. Whereas at 2010 it suddenly jumped above to 50 number of participants.
In amateur dramatics activities number of participants were near 30 in 2000 and slight surged in 2005. However after 2005 it decreased to below 10 number of participants in 2020.
In martial arts the numbers of participants were fluctuated . While it starts near 40 participants. Then it reduced to 30 numbers of participants , and the repetition was occurred .
In film club the maximum numbers of participants was recorded above 60 in 2000. sharp 60 numbers of participants in 2010 then it climbed to near 70 numbers of participants in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for each activity. You have successfully identified the main trends, such as the film club's dominance and the sudden rise in table tennis participation. However, the report lacks a clear, analytical overview that synthesises the data effectively. While you mention the film club and amateur dramatics, the summary could be more cohesive by grouping activities with similar trends. Some data points are slightly inaccurate or vague, such as describing the martial arts trend as 'repetition was occurred,' which does not clearly describe the data. To improve, ensure you provide a more precise summary of the overall trends in the introductory paragraph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use some cohesive devices like 'In detail,' 'However,' and 'Whereas' to link ideas. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly unnatural. For example, the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is abrupt. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'the repetition was occurred,' which makes it difficult to follow the logic of the trend. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe the trends, such as 'fluctuated,' 'surged,' and 'climbed.' However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'scored lowest participants,' 'sudden increased happen,' and 'minimally up and down was show.' These errors occasionally impede the clarity of your descriptions. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations for describing trends, such as 'experienced a surge' instead of 'slight surged,' and ensure that your verb forms are used correctly in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include incorrect verb tenses ('musical performances start in 2005'), subject-verb agreement ('the numbers of participants were fluctuated'), and awkward phrasing ('the repetition was occurred'). While these errors do not completely prevent the reader from understanding the main points, they are frequent enough to distract from the content. To improve, pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement and the correct use of passive and active voice when describing data trends.
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