Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph provides data on the number of participants for multiple events at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for time period between 2000 and 2020. The Film club participants are held highest among all activities as well as Amateur dramatics decreased significantly for three years.
According to the line graph, The people in a film club are represented highest overall period. In the year 2000, recorded with 65 participants and for a decade people had decreased to 61 and 60 by 2005 and 2010 as well as increased to 65 and 70 respectively by 2015 and 2020. The participants in table tennis are recorded between 15 to 20 people in 2000 and 2005, there were no increased players by 2010. After five years the participants had increased drastically to nearly 40 and to 51 in the year of 2015 and 2020. Martial arts are accounted constant by increasing and decreasing for every five years, recorded 36 people in 2000 and 31 people in 2005 as well as 40 participants in 2010 also 32 people in 2015 and 38 people in 2020.
People are participated in Amateur dramatics nearly 26 in the year 2000 and increased a little bit for 30 people, From 2010, 2015, and 2020 participants had fall to 20, nearly to 10, and 5 players respectively. The musical activity participants are represented in 2005 and for next five years of 2010 had 10 people and by 2015 increased to 15 participants also accounted to 20 people in the year 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response provides a clear overview of the main trends, such as the Film club being the most popular activity and the decline in Amateur dramatics. However, the reporting of data is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, stating that 'there were no increased players by 2010' for table tennis is unclear, and the description of Martial arts as 'constant by increasing and decreasing' is contradictory. While the main features are identified, the lack of precision in describing the data points and the failure to make meaningful comparisons between the activities limits the score. The response covers all parts of the task, but the analysis is not fully developed or consistently accurate.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'as well as' are overused to connect unrelated ideas, and some transitions are awkward, such as 'After five years the participants had increased drastically'. The referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when discussing the timeline. While there is a logical progression from the introduction to the body paragraphs, the flow is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures, which prevents the writing from reaching a higher band.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher score. There are several instances of awkward word choice, such as 'participants are held highest' instead of 'participation was highest' and 'accounted constant' instead of 'remained relatively stable'. The student relies on basic verbs like 'increased' and 'decreased' repeatedly. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of sophisticated collocations and the presence of word-choice errors (e.g., 'no increased players') indicate a limited range that is just sufficient to communicate the main points.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('The Film club participants are held highest'), incorrect tense usage ('participants had fall'), and awkward prepositional phrases. Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence construction is often clunky. While the student attempts complex structures, they are frequently faulty, which is characteristic of the Band 5 level. To improve, the student should focus on consistent tense usage and refining sentence structure to avoid awkward phrasing.
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