Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line chart illustrates how many people enrolled in the different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, majority of participants participated in the film club and made it the most attracting activity. Table tennis and musical performances experienced a significant growth in the number of participants while amateur dramatics recorded a downfall and martial art showed a stable numbers.
In 2000, film club made up 65 while musical performances did not record any entry but after 2005 it increased gradually to 20 by 2020. Other activities like martial art comprised nearly 35 sightly followed by amateur at 25 and table tennis at 15. For film club, figures decreased by 2010 but it regain same numbers by 2020.
Even though, undergoing significant fluctuations martial art lured similar number of participants as that in 2000. Table tennis was preferred by lesser number of people than dramatics. But the scenario changed table tennis became the second most game for leisure activity in 2020. On the other hand, the figures for dramatics decreased to 5 by 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task and provides a clear overview of the main trends. You successfully identified the most popular activity (film club) and noted the significant changes in table tennis and amateur dramatics. However, the report lacks precision in data reporting. For instance, stating 'film club made up 65' is unclear as it lacks units, and the description of the trends is sometimes vague. To improve, ensure that every data point mentioned is clearly linked to the correct year and category, and avoid generalizations like 'the scenario changed' without specifying the exact nature of that change.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. There is a clear progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'Even though, undergoing significant fluctuations'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to track which activity is being discussed. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their antecedents would help the flow of the text significantly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the main points, using terms like 'fluctuations', 'enrolled', and 'comprised'. However, there are some word choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'most attracting activity' (should be 'most popular') and 'second most game' (should be 'second most popular activity'). Additionally, the repetition of 'numbers' and 'figures' suggests a limited range for describing statistical trends. Using more precise synonyms for increase and decrease would elevate your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as missing articles ('the majority', 'the film club'), incorrect verb forms ('it regain same numbers'), and awkward phrasing ('comprised nearly 35 sightly followed by'). These errors do not impede communication, but they are noticeable. To reach a higher band, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions when describing data.
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