Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph tracks data about the numbers of participants in various activities at social centre in Australia for the following perion 2000 to 2010

Overall,the line graph divided into 5 stages where it illustrates the propotion of different activities it will be shortly discouss about the activities.as film club has the most number of participants on the other hand,musical perfomance has very less participants in the following year.

At first stage,from 2000 to 2010 film club had the large number of candidate of the activity.then,martial atrs always held the almost same amount of people it was around 35 to around 40

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 102 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. The overview is poorly constructed, and the description of the data is incomplete, failing to cover the full period up to 2020 or provide sufficient comparisons between the activities. The summary lacks the necessary detail to be considered a full report of the main features, as it focuses on only two categories and omits significant trends or data points. To improve, you must ensure all parts of the prompt are addressed and provide a more comprehensive analysis of the data provided in the graph.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response lacks a clear logical progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the structure is disjointed. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the awkward transition 'at first stage'. The lack of clear linking words makes the relationship between the ideas difficult to follow. The introduction and overview are merged in a way that confuses the reader. To improve, you should use clear paragraph breaks for the introduction, overview, and body paragraphs, and employ a wider range of cohesive devices like 'in contrast', 'furthermore', or 'subsequently' to guide the reader through your analysis.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are several spelling errors, such as 'perion' instead of 'period', 'propotion' for 'proportion', 'discouss' for 'discuss', and 'atrs' for 'arts'. The word choice is often imprecise, such as using 'candidate' to refer to participants. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to describing graphs, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'peaked', and 'declined', and ensure you proofread your work to eliminate basic spelling mistakes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede clarity. There are issues with sentence structure, such as run-on sentences and missing punctuation. For example, 'Overall,the line graph divided into 5 stages where it illustrates...' is grammatically incorrect. There are also errors in verb tense and subject-verb agreement, such as 'musical perfomance has very less participants'. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To improve, you should practice using a mix of complex sentence structures and focus on basic grammatical accuracy, particularly with articles, prepositions, and verb forms.

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