Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph tracks data about the numbers of participants in various activities at social centre in Australia for the following perion 2000 to 2010
Overall,the line graph divided into 5 stages where it illustrates the propotion of different activities it will be shortly discouss about the activities.as film club has the most number of participants on the other hand,musical perfomance has very less participants in the following year.
At first stage,from 2000 to 2010 film club had the large number of candidate of the activity.then,martial atrs always held the almost same
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 92 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. The overview is underdeveloped, and the description of the data is incomplete, as the response stops abruptly mid-sentence. Key features such as trends over the full 20-year period are not adequately covered, and the comparison between activities is minimal. To improve, you must ensure you describe all categories shown in the graph and provide a clear, comprehensive summary of the main trends and significant changes over the entire timeframe provided in the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response lacks a clear logical progression. While there is an attempt at an overview, the paragraphing is ineffective, and the text ends abruptly, which disrupts the flow of information. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the awkward transition 'it will be shortly discouss about'. The lack of a concluding sentence or a complete body paragraph makes the structure feel fragmented. To improve, focus on using clear linking words (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Furthermore', 'Subsequently') to connect your ideas and ensure each paragraph has a clear purpose and is fully developed.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are several spelling errors, such as 'perion' (period), 'propotion' (proportion), 'discouss' (discuss), 'perfomance' (performance), and 'atrs' (arts). The word choice is often imprecise, such as using 'candidate' to refer to participants. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data accurately. To improve, you should learn topic-specific vocabulary for describing graphs, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'peaked', and 'experienced a downward trend', and proofread your work carefully to eliminate basic spelling mistakes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with punctuation, such as missing spaces after commas and lack of capitalization at the start of sentences. Sentence structures are simple and often incomplete, such as the final sentence which trails off. There is a lack of control over basic grammar, including subject-verb agreement and article usage (e.g., 'at social centre'). To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practicing the correct use of articles and prepositions.
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