Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph provides information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social Centre in melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Table tennis were at peak from all of them. whereas Amateur dramatics shows major decline from 2000 to 2020.
intially, film club have 65 participants in 2000 is 61 in 2005 60 in 2010. Although it show some rise to 64 again in 2015 & 65 in 2020. secondly martial arts show minor fluctuation it consist 36 members in 2000 which reduce to 31 in 2005
Furthermore, It shows inerest in its participants to 38 in 2010 then 32 in 2015 & 35 in 2020.
Thirdly, dramatics gradually declined almost near to vanished. It contain 26 members in 2000 to slightly increase to 28 in 2005. After that it gradually decrease to 20 in 2010 Then 12 in 2015 & 5 in 2020.
Fourthly, table tennis were at peak. It shows significantly increase. The trend in start was low which was 16 in 2000 then rise to 18 in 2005 then 20 in 2010 Then 36
2020.
Musical Performance was not major attraction. No one take part in it till 2005. However, 10 members were participated in 2010 then 13 in 2020.
Overall considering the features majority of the individual moving towards film industry/club & amateur dramatics in both activities shows major increase its participants whereas attraction towards other fields remain decreased.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers all categories of data, but the analysis is inconsistent. While you identify the main trends, the summary is inaccurate; for instance, you state that amateur dramatics showed a 'major increase,' when the data clearly shows a significant decline. Furthermore, the overview is confusing and contradicts the body paragraphs. To improve, ensure your overview highlights the most significant trends (e.g., the rise of table tennis versus the decline of dramatics) and verify that your summary statements align with the actual data points provided in the graph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the flow is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. The use of cohesive devices like 'intially,' 'secondly,' and 'fourthly' is somewhat repetitive and formulaic. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of ideas. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that logically connects to the next section of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You rely on basic verbs like 'show,' 'increase,' and 'reduce' throughout the text. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'interest in its participants' and 'near to vanished.' To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise vocabulary for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated,' 'remained stable,' or 'experienced a sharp decline.' Additionally, ensure you use correct terminology for data reporting, such as 'peaked at' instead of 'were at peak.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Table tennis were,' 'film club have,' 'dramatics... contain') and tense usage. Sentence structures are generally simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of capital letters and sentence fragments. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and practice combining simple sentences into more complex structures using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions.
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