Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given representation demonstrates the count of participants in various endeavors at social center located in Melbourne, Australia from the time period of 2000 to 2010.
To begin, the activity with the highest participants was Film club which remained constant at 65 players with a little fluctuations throughout the time period of 20 years. Whereas, table tennis had the lowest players in 2000 at 18 players, which were 20 players till 2010 and drastically increased to 55 players till 2020.
Moving further, martial arts was an activity which had 36 players in 2000 and with some players joining and leaving through the time period, but it regained 36 players at 2020 and remained constant. Moreover, amateur dramatics had 26 and 28 player in 2000 and 2005 respectively, which drastic decline from year 2005 to 2020 it remained with the lowest at 5 players.
At last, surprisingly musical performances were introduced in 2005 which still did better than amateur dramatics till 2020 with 26 players.
Overall, the most preferred activity was film club which stayed at top with the most numbers of participants and the least favorite was amateur dramatics which was still lower than the activity introduced lately which is musical performances .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, including the trends for the various activities. However, there are inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, you state the period is 2000 to 2010, but the graph covers 2000 to 2020. Additionally, you mention the Film club remained constant at 65, whereas the graph shows fluctuations. The description of the 'drastic' decline for amateur dramatics is accurate, but the overall summary lacks a clear, comparative overview of the data trends. To reach a higher band, ensure data points are cited precisely and the overview synthesizes the information rather than just listing details.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To begin', 'Moving further', and 'Overall'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'At last' to introduce a new point. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the referencing within sentences could be smoother. For example, the transition between the description of table tennis and martial arts could be improved to better link the comparison of trends.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to describe trends like 'drastic increase' and 'remained constant'. However, there are some word choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'count of participants in various endeavors' and 'players' used for activities like the Film club, where 'members' or 'participants' would be more appropriate. You attempt some less common vocabulary, but the precision is inconsistent. To improve, focus on using more academic collocations and ensuring that the terminology matches the context of the data provided.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'which were 20 players till 2010' (should be 'which rose to 20'), '26 and 28 player' (missing plural 's'), and 'which drastic decline' (missing verb). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the main points, they are frequent enough to impact the flow. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of relative clauses to ensure your complex sentences are error-free.
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