Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
This chart depicts various factors of countries represent information about social centre about Melbourne ,Australia from year 2000 to 2020.It will expl ain relevant data and detail reports of participants in firm club,martial arts ,amateur dramatics ,table tennis and musical performances.
In the first paragraph i will explain about hownumver of people activities effecting every year.Although in the year 2000 table tennis playing very important role as its working capacity start increasing 10%.In my opinion the working capacity of team in 2005 about musical performances shows 13% increase in its activity wherever in 2010 musical performances,table tennis and martial arts represent same level of data implementation.Firm club increasing capacity shows same development from 2000 to 2020.However in 2015 and 2020 table tennis declines from 13% to 5%.. nevertheless the variation in rates of activity demonstarte icrease and decrease within limlit of time working conditions.Martial arts shows exploration to 35% in the year 2010 and it remains same within time.
Overall , there are strong capable competition in sports and musical activities which shows consequences according to relevant information given in graph.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. The information presented is often confusing and lacks a logical connection to the graph. For instance, the mention of '10% increase' or '13% increase' does not clearly correspond to the trends shown in the graph, and the reference to 'data implementation' is unclear. The overview is weak and does not highlight the main trends or significant differences between the activities. The response struggles to select and report the main features effectively, leading to a fragmented and inaccurate summary of the provided information.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. The introduction is poorly phrased, and the body paragraphs do not follow a clear progression of ideas. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often inappropriate, such as the misuse of 'wherever' and 'nevertheless'. Paragraphing is present but does not serve to organize the information logically. The transition between sentences is often abrupt, making it difficult for the reader to follow the writer's train of thought. The overall arrangement of information is disjointed, which significantly hinders the clarity of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is limited and often used incorrectly. Phrases such as 'data implementation', 'working capacity', and 'strong capable competition' are used in ways that do not convey the intended meaning. There are frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'hownumver', 'demonstarte', 'icrease', 'limlit') and word choice inaccuracies that impede communication. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends or data points accurately, and the writer relies on repetitive and imprecise language throughout the response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often obscure the meaning. There are issues with sentence structure, such as run-on sentences and fragments. Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, and the use of articles and prepositions is frequently incorrect. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are almost always faulty, leading to confusion. Punctuation is also problematic, with erratic spacing and misuse of commas. While the reader can occasionally grasp the general topic, the high frequency of errors makes the text difficult to read and understand.
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