Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The lines graph compare the information of number of participants in different activities at social centre in Melbourne, Australia betweek 2000 to 2020.
Overall, Film club remain constant and having a huge interest from the participants in every year. In contrast Martial art having slightly decline in 2005 after that very few fluctuation was recorded. However, Amature dramtics having little spike in 2005 after that we see a continous decline and participants didn't show any interest towards this field. Whereas, Table Tennis initiate with the low interest keep steady till 2010 after that seen a massive hike in the graph and people start taking interest in this game till 2020 they reached above 50 participants. Musical Performance was not popular in the start of 2000 till 2005, after that people take interest gradually in this field and they reached to the 15 particpants approx.
In the summary, From 2005 Film Club is one of the popular activities amongs the partcipants and remain constant at the top tier. In contrast, Muscial Performance remain least famous amongs the people. Where martial arts and amateur dramatics remain mid tier popular and Table Tennis is rank at mid tier when it was started but after 2010 we observe a huge interest from the people till 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for all five activities. You successfully identified the main trends, such as the stability of the Film Club and the significant growth of Table Tennis. However, the report lacks a clear, analytical overview that synthesizes the data effectively. While you mention some trends in the body paragraphs, the 'Overall' section is somewhat repetitive and lacks a cohesive summary of the most significant changes. To improve, ensure your overview highlights the most striking differences or similarities across the entire period rather than just listing individual activity trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, phrases like 'In contrast' and 'However' are used frequently but sometimes do not logically connect the preceding and following ideas. Additionally, the transition between the body paragraphs and the summary is somewhat disjointed. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as 'after that' being used repeatedly to describe different timeframes. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring they are used to show logical relationships between data points would enhance the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the main trends, such as 'fluctuation', 'decline', and 'steady'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'Amature dramtics' (spelling), 'initiate with the low interest', and 'people take interest gradually'. Some terms are used incorrectly, such as 'huge interest' or 'little spike'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations (e.g., 'a significant increase' instead of 'a massive hike') and ensure accurate spelling of key terms like 'amateur' and 'dramatics'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Film club remain constant', 'Martial art having slightly decline') and missing articles or prepositions. The tense usage is also inconsistent, shifting between present and past in ways that do not always align with the timeline of the graph. To improve, focus on consistent verb tense usage for historical data and ensure that subjects and verbs agree in number. Proofreading for basic sentence construction will help reduce these errors.
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