Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph illustrates how the number of participants changed in different activities at one social centre in melbourne, Australia ober the period 2000 to 2010. The film club had significant growth during the whole period

while Amateur dramatics showed major fluctuation during each period. Whereas table tennis showed a rise during the period. The film club had 64 members in 2000 that will end in 66 members in 2010. The musical Performance was absent during first five years then rose to

10 members 2010 to

16 members in 2020.

Table tennis had

Fewer members in the beginning.

However it increased from 18

members in 2000 to 53

by the end of 2020.

Amateure dramatics

showed a decline from 28

members to 6 members

in 2020.

The martial arts grew

steadily with 38 members

in 2000 to 39 in 2010

then showed a decline to

38 members.

In addition, the trend

toward amateur dramatics almost

Ceased with passage

of time. The majority of people moved towards

the table tennis & the film club.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the growth in table tennis and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, the data reporting is inconsistent and contains inaccuracies. For instance, you mention the film club had 64 members in 2000 and 66 in 2010, but the graph shows a different trajectory. Furthermore, the time period is misstated in the introduction as 2000 to 2010, whereas the graph covers 2000 to 2020. While you identify key trends, the lack of precision in data interpretation and the failure to accurately reflect the full timeframe limit the score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is divided into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the flow is disjointed due to the fragmented sentence structure and the way data points are presented. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'in 2000' and 'in 2020'. The progression of ideas is somewhat logical, but the lack of smooth transitions between the descriptions of different activities makes the overall argument feel like a list of observations rather than a cohesive summary.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely on basic verbs like 'grew', 'showed', and 'rose'. There are also some spelling errors, such as 'ober' instead of 'over' and 'Amateure' instead of 'Amateur'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is limited, and there is little attempt to use more sophisticated or academic collocations to describe trends, such as 'experienced a significant surge' or 'witnessed a gradual decline'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Issues include incorrect verb tenses ('that will end in 66 members'), missing articles, and awkward phrasing ('The musical Performance was absent during first five years'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary line breaks that disrupt the readability of the text. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensuring that complex sentences are constructed with greater accuracy.

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