Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line of illustrated information on the numbers of participants, by activity in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, In the graphs shows the number of participants with different activities like film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances from the years of 2000 to 2020.
In 2000, Film club number of participants were about higher than 60 however the number not stabled as same in others years. Subsequently, Martial arts participants were like a snake shape in line from 2000 to 2020.
After that, amateur dramatics number of participants was about less than 30 but higher than 20 in 2000. However, the number increased from 2000 to 2005 after that the number declined frequently from 2005 to 2020.
By Contrast, the number of participants in table tennis increased from 2000 to 2005. Subsequently, the numbers were same as well as from 2005 to 2010. After that the number of participants were rise frequently from 2010 to 2020. After that musical performances were growth from 2005 to 2020 however in 2000 the number of participants were not there.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the graph, but the analysis is superficial and lacks a clear overview. While you identify some trends, the descriptions are often vague (e.g., 'snake shape in line') rather than using precise data points or comparative language. You fail to highlight the most significant trends, such as which activity was the most popular overall or the clear divergence in trends between 2000 and 2020. To improve, you must provide a clear summary of the main trends in the introduction and support your points with specific figures from the graph to demonstrate a more thorough understanding of the data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression of ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as the repetitive use of 'After that' and 'Subsequently' to start sentences. The referencing is also unclear; for example, 'the number not stabled as same in others years' is difficult to follow. To reach a higher band, you should use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus, moving logically from one trend to the next rather than listing them in a disjointed manner.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'number of participants' and 'increased'. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'not stabled as same' and 'rise frequently', which hinder the clarity of your report. You need to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a downward trend'. Expanding your range of descriptive verbs and nouns will allow you to convey information more accurately and professionally, which is essential for Task 1 responses.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the graphs shows', 'the number of participants were'), incorrect verb forms ('were rise', 'were growth'), and missing articles. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that you are using the correct tense for describing past data. Proofreading for these fundamental errors will significantly improve your score.
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