Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This graph shows Number of Participants doing different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia between the period of 2000 to 2020. In these years ratio of participants change significantly.
In 2000 15 participants take part in table tennis. Film club has the most participants started in 2000 and lasts till 2020. 65 Participants take active part in Film club. Other activities like martial arts, Amateur dramatics, Musical Performances are there in social centre of Melbourne, Australia.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. The content is very limited and does not provide a comprehensive summary of the data. While the student mentions a few activities, there is no attempt to describe the trends over the 20-year period or make meaningful comparisons between the categories. The overview is missing, and the information provided is fragmented. To improve, the student must describe the overall trends (increases or decreases) and include specific data points for all categories shown in the graph to ensure all parts of the task are addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is too short to demonstrate effective paragraphing or a logical progression of ideas. While there is a basic attempt to separate the introduction from the body, the lack of cohesive devices makes the text feel disjointed. There is no clear structure to guide the reader through the data. To improve, the student should use linking words such as 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'subsequently' to connect sentences and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus, such as grouping activities by their trends.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'take part' and 'participants' are used repeatedly without variation. There is no attempt to use more sophisticated or academic vocabulary to describe the data, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable'. The student relies on simple, everyday language that does not demonstrate the range required for higher bands. Expanding the vocabulary to include topic-specific terms related to data analysis is essential for improvement.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors, such as 'In these years ratio of participants change significantly' (missing articles and incorrect verb tense) and 'Film club has the most participants started in 2000' (awkward phrasing). The sentence structures are simple and lack the complexity needed for higher scores. There are issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage throughout the text. To improve, the student should focus on using a mix of simple and complex sentences and proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy.
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