Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given line graph illustrates the data on number of participants for different activities that include film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances in 2000 and 2020 at one social center in Melbourne, Australia.
Overall, the most number of participants was in film club in both years. Martial arts almost remained same throughout in both years. Moreover, musical performances rose and amateur dramatics decreased in 2020 compared to 2000. Table tennis was the most performing activity in 2020 compared to 2000.
Film club was on the top in number of participants in both years which were around 65. Smilarly ,table tennis participants was around 15 to 20 in 2000 and participants expanded to 55 in 2020. Same like that, musical performances was 0 in 2000 and they climbed to 17 in 2020.
Number of martial arts participants stayed almost same in both years. In addition, the number of amateur dramatics was 27 in 2000 and they declinrd to 5 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for all five activities. You have successfully identified the main trends, such as the dominance of the film club and the significant growth in table tennis. However, the analysis is somewhat descriptive rather than analytical. For instance, stating 'Table tennis was the most performing activity' is slightly inaccurate as it was not the highest overall, but rather the one with the most significant growth. To reach a higher band, ensure that comparisons are more precise and that you group data logically to highlight the most significant changes rather than listing each activity individually.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. The use of cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'Moreover', and 'In addition' helps guide the reader. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical or awkward, such as 'Same like that', which is not appropriate for academic writing. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the connection between sentences could be smoother to improve the flow of information. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the overview from the detailed data analysis.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information, using terms like 'participants', 'declined', and 'climbed'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'most performing activity' and 'most number of participants'. Additionally, there are minor spelling errors like 'Smilarly' and 'declinrd'. To improve, focus on using more precise academic collocations and ensure that your spelling is accurate. The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the sophistication required for higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'Martial arts almost remained same' (missing 'the'), 'participants was' (subject-verb agreement), and 'the most number of participants' (awkward phrasing). These errors do not impede communication, but they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Increasing the variety of complex structures and ensuring consistent subject-verb agreement will help improve your score in this criterion.
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