Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The line graph compares the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, film club had the highest number of participant throughout the period. Also, the number of participants in marital arts fluctuated from the beginning until the end. The number of participants of amateur dramatics increased slightly before experiencing a continuous decline for most of the years. By contrary, the number of participants for table tennis experienced an upward growth throughout the period. Meanwhile, musical at no participant until after 2005.

In 2000, film club has about 65 participants, followed by marital arts which was around 36 participants. Amateur dramatics had roughly 25 participants. Meanwhile, table tennis accounted for about 16 participants. Nevertheless, musical performance had no participant in 2000 and 2005.

For the remaining years, the number of participants of marital arts was between 32 to 38 from 2005 until 2020. However, the number of participants of film club declined slightly from 2005 until 2010 and grew minimally until the 2020 and peaked at about 78 participants.

Furthermore, the number of participants of amateur dramatics declined sharply from 2005 until 2020 and represented the least number of participants at about 7 participants. By contrast, In 2015, participants of table tennis overtook marital arts and showed and upward rise till the end. Meanwhile, musical performance had no participants until after 2005 and experienced a steady increase until the end.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for all five activities. You successfully identified the overall trends and made relevant comparisons, such as noting when table tennis overtook martial arts. However, the report could be improved by ensuring data points are more precise; for instance, stating 'about 65' is acceptable, but the analysis of the 'musical performance' trend is slightly vague. The overview is clear, but ensure that all comparisons are fully supported by the data provided in the graph to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You used cohesive devices such as 'In 2000', 'Nevertheless', 'Furthermore', and 'By contrast' to link ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally repetitive (e.g., 'the number of participants of...'). Improving the variety of cohesive devices and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the flow and help the response move into the higher band range.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuated', 'upward growth', and 'peaked'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'By contrary' (should be 'In contrast' or 'Conversely') and 'musical at no participant' (should be 'musical performance had no participants'). To improve, focus on using more precise academic collocations and avoid repeating the same phrases to describe trends throughout the report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'film club has' (should be 'had' for past tense), 'marital arts' (should be 'martial arts'), and 'showed and upward rise' (should be 'an'). Additionally, some articles are missing or misused. To achieve a higher score, you need to increase the frequency of error-free sentences and ensure consistent tense usage when describing historical data.

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