Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The line graph illustrates data on the figures of those that took part for different activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia from the year 2000 to 2020.

Overall, it is clear from the chart that the number of participants in film club and martal arts fluctuated over the years, while the figures of those that took part in amateur dramatics declined over the years. Moreover, the numbers of those that participated in table tennis and musical performances increased over the period.

In 2000, about 65 individuals took part in film club, this figure remained unchanged until 2010 when it slightly decreased to 60, then it slightly rose to 65 over the next 10 years. Furthermore, martial arts had about a number of 38 participants in 2000; however this figure fluctuated over the years.

Amateur dramatics had a figure of about 27 individual that took part in it in 2000 until 2005, the figures dramatically declined to about 5 through out the period of 15 years. Additionally ,table tennis participants started at about 18 participants in 2000, this figure fluctuated until 2010, then it eventually skyrocketed to about 52 participants in 2020. In 2005, there were no participants until the figures increased to 10 and then gradually increased 15 in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main trends and provided a clear overview of the data. You covered all categories (film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis, and musical performances) and made relevant comparisons. However, the description of the data is occasionally imprecise, such as stating martial arts 'fluctuated' without specifying the range or key turning points. Additionally, the final sentence regarding musical performances is confusing because it lacks a clear subject or reference to the specific activity name, making it difficult to follow the data progression. To improve, ensure every trend is clearly linked to the specific activity and provide more precise data points to support your observations.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', and 'however' to link ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the final paragraph where the transition between table tennis and the final activity is abrupt. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the flow between sentences could be improved by varying the structure of your cohesive links rather than relying on simple sentence-initial connectors.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuated', 'declined', and 'skyrocketed'. However, there are some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'figures of those that took part' and 'had about a number of 38 participants', which are repetitive and slightly unnatural. There is also a spelling error ('martal arts') and a punctuation error ('Additionally ,table'). To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic collocations and avoiding wordy, repetitive phrasing when describing numerical data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical slips, such as '27 individual that took part' (should be plural 'individuals') and 'through out' (should be one word 'throughout'). Some sentences are comma-spliced, such as '65 individuals took part in film club, this figure remained unchanged'. Increasing the variety of complex structures while ensuring subject-verb agreement and correct punctuation would significantly improve your score. Focus on proofreading to eliminate minor errors that occur when attempting more complex sentence constructions.

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