Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph represents how many people participates in different activities at social center in Melbourne and Australia between 2000 to 2020.t
Overall, film club and martial arts remain consistent while remaining activities face fluctuations throughout whole period.
From the beginning, Film club was consistent and in 2010 it has been shifted upward, and it became superlative with almost 70 numbers of participants in the end of period. Martial arts also have the same pattern and at it has been gained approximately 40 participants.
On the other hand, table tennis in 2010 shifted upward, it reached on its peak with 50 numbers in 2020. Amateur dramatics face decline in 2005 and it reached its lowest in 2020 with almost 5 numbers of partic
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the response. While the main features are identified, the description is incomplete, particularly regarding the final data points and the overall comparison. The analysis is under-developed, and the conclusion is cut off mid-sentence. To improve, ensure all data trends are fully described and the response reaches the required length to allow for a comprehensive summary of the provided graph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response uses basic paragraphing, but the flow is hindered by the incomplete nature of the text. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Overall' and 'On the other hand', but they are somewhat mechanical. The progression of ideas is logical, but the abrupt ending disrupts the overall coherence of the report. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, complete structure that guides the reader through the data trends effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'shifted upward' and 'numbers of participants' are used repeatedly, which lacks the precision expected at higher bands. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'superlative' (which is not appropriate for describing a data point) and 'remaining activities' (which should be 'the remaining activities'). To improve, incorporate more precise reporting verbs and nouns, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'experienced a decline', and 'the majority of'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors that affect clarity. Examples include 'how many people participates' (subject-verb agreement), 'between 2000 to 2020' (incorrect preposition usage), and 'at it has been gained' (redundant 'at'). Sentence structures are mostly simple, with limited attempts at complex sentences. There are also issues with tense consistency, as the response mixes present and past tenses when describing historical data. Improving control over verb tenses and subject-verb agreement is essential for a higher score.
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