Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The chart illustrates the information on the number of participants for different at the social center in Melbourne, Australia of the time period from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the number of participants are film club, Martial arts, Amateur dramatics , table tennis and musical performers. Over the time period from the 2000 to 2020 the most highest record of the members taken are in the film club about 79 participants and the least one is of amateur dramatics that had been dramatically reduced by the number of the about 5 participants in 2020 while it was started from almost 27 participants in in the year 2000 .
While the number of martial arts members who have taken part has been increasing and reducing between 30 to 40.
If we take a look to the table tennis record that have been shown in the figure was about conventionally 18 participants involved in that in the 2000 that had reached to the 51 participants in the time 2020 which shows the second most highest record. And the participants of the musical performers have been touched the record of almost 18 participants as it started by strictly zero participants.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the trends for the film club and amateur dramatics. However, the overview is weak; it lists the categories rather than identifying the significant trends or overall patterns. The description of the data is sometimes inaccurate or confusing, such as stating the film club had '79 participants' when the graph shows a different figure, and the description of martial arts as 'increasing and reducing' is vague. To improve, you should focus on clearly identifying the highest and lowest points and the most significant changes over the period, ensuring the data cited matches the visual information provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is hindered by awkward phrasing and a lack of clear cohesive devices. Transitions between sentences are often abrupt or missing, making the text feel like a list of observations rather than a cohesive report. For example, the transition 'If we take a look to the table tennis record' is informal and clunky. While there is an attempt to group information, the lack of sophisticated linking words makes the flow of ideas disjointed. Improving the use of cohesive devices like 'consequently', 'in contrast', or 'meanwhile' would significantly enhance the readability of your report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'most highest record' (a double superlative) and 'strictly zero participants'. The phrasing 'the number of participants are film club' is grammatically incorrect and imprecise. You rely on basic vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'increasing and reducing', rather than using more precise academic terms like 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'declined'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more varied and accurate vocabulary to describe data trends and avoid redundant expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'the number of participants are' and 'the table tennis record that have been shown'. Sentence structures are often repetitive and contain errors in preposition usage and article placement, such as 'in in the year 2000'. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are often poorly constructed or contain errors that affect the meaning. Focusing on basic sentence structure accuracy and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would help improve your score in this area.
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