Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one specific social center in the city Melbourne of the country Australia for the time period of 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the number of participants of film club had accounted for the highest number in all year while, amateur dramatics had the lowest which was decreased from second year. Material arts experienced some fluctuation from starting to ending and remained stable in the same place.
As depicted in graph, large number contestant over 60 participate film club in 2000 and fell slight down in 2010 at 60 and reached at below 70 which remained at the peak in all year. However, amateur dramatics rose up to 30 in 2005 and fells drastically at close to 0 in 2020.
In the context of materials arts, is experienced some fluctuation, in 2000 the number of participants was between 30 and 40 which keeps fluctuating over the year and remained stable at below 40 at 2020.Musical performance started from 0 in 2005 and rose up to around 20 at 2020. The number of participants in table tennis was close to 20 in 2010 which rose rapidly and reached at over 50 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task and identifies key trends, such as the film club's dominance and the decline of amateur dramatics. However, the reporting of data is occasionally inaccurate or confusing, such as the description of the film club's figures, which are difficult to follow. The overview is present but lacks clarity in its phrasing. To improve, ensure that data points are cited precisely and that the summary of trends is more logically structured. While the main features are highlighted, the lack of precision in describing the fluctuations and specific values limits the effectiveness of the report.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'In the context of materials arts, is experienced some fluctuation'. The flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed, and the referencing is occasionally unclear. While there is an overall progression, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the repetitive sentence structures hinder the logical flow. Improving the variety of transition signals and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'Material arts' (instead of Martial arts) and 'large number contestant'. The range of vocabulary is limited, and the student relies on basic descriptors like 'rose up' or 'fell down'. There is little evidence of less common lexical items or precise collocations related to data description. To reach a higher band, the student should focus on using more academic vocabulary for trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a sharp decline'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include missing articles ('in city Melbourne'), incorrect verb forms ('is experienced some fluctuation'), and subject-verb agreement errors ('number of participants... had accounted'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence construction and proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement would be beneficial.
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