Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graph illustrates the number of participants for different activities at single social Centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, musical performances were started after 2005. Participants of table tennis were almost same by 2010 and rosed drastically by the end of the period. Dramatics participants were steady in first five years of the timeline but they dropped till 2020. Martial arts and film club participants remained almost same with little fluctuations over the period.
Members of film club were consistent throughout the timeline dropping a little bit in 2010 and again gaining the same number by the end of 2020.
Similar to that, martial art players decreased in 2005 and 2015 but achieved the same number as of starting. Drama performers increased a little from 2000 to 2005 but fell all of sudden below 10 participants by 2020.
Table tennis players were 20 in numbers by 2005 and increased rapidly and reached 50 by 2020. There were no musical performances from 2000 to 2005, after this period performances started and reached above more than 10 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for each activity. You successfully identified the main trends, such as the dramatic rise in table tennis and the decline in drama. However, the overview is slightly weak; while you mention musical performances started after 2005, a more comprehensive overview would summarize the most significant overall trends across all categories. The data is generally accurate, though the description of the film club and martial arts as 'almost same' could be more precise by referencing specific data points to support these observations. Overall, you have addressed the task requirements well.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Overall' and 'Similar to that', to link ideas. However, the progression between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the paragraphing could be improved by grouping activities with similar trends together rather than listing them individually. Referencing is generally clear, but the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs could be smoother to enhance the flow of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'drastically', 'consistent', and 'fluctuations'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'rosed drastically' (should be 'rose') and 'achieved the same number as of starting'. Additionally, some phrasing is repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'participants' and 'number'. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for trends and data points to show greater flexibility and precision in your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'musical performances were started' (passive voice error), 'almost same' (missing article 'the'), and 'fell all of sudden' (missing article 'a'). While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. You should focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Improving your control over these basic structures will help ensure that your more complex sentences are error-free.
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