Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The First of all the time period of the musical performance participants are not started in the 2000 this can be raised in the 2005 to 2020 upward
The Second point is the Table tennis this is the only game that raises from the start and this uptrend is 2010 this is the year where the most of the participants are participating in this game
The Third point is the Amateur Dramatics participants This is the only game when first move upward till 2005 and the moment all the participants are leaving the game and downtrend started and 2020 is the end of the year where most of the all participants mostly leave
The Fourth point Martial Arts this is the game where the participants are floating mean every 5 years the trend is raise and the next 5 years this move the downtrend and till 2020
The Fifth point is the film club this is the most actively participants activity in the center in Melbourne, Australia It includes the almost 60+ participants in this activity and his started years drop 5 to 10 participant in 2000 - 2010 and then he raised upto 70+ participant in
time of 2010 - 2020
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to describe the trends for each activity, but it fails to provide a clear overview or effectively compare the data. The information is presented as a list of points rather than a cohesive report. Several descriptions are inaccurate or confusing, such as the claim that musical performance 'are not started in the 2000' or the vague description of Martial Arts as 'floating'. The response lacks a summary of the main features and fails to synthesize the data, which is essential for an Academic Task 1 response. The analysis is superficial and does not clearly highlight the most significant trends or differences between the activities.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is organized into a list-like structure using 'The First of all', 'The Second point', etc. This is a mechanical and repetitive way to structure a report. There is no logical progression between the paragraphs, and the lack of cohesive devices makes the text feel disjointed. The paragraphing is used to separate points, but the internal flow within these paragraphs is poor. The referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended meaning or the relationship between the data points.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. Phrases like 'the most actively participants activity' and 'his started years drop' are grammatically incorrect and hinder clarity. The student relies on basic, repetitive language to describe trends, such as 'raises', 'uptrend', and 'downtrend', without demonstrating the ability to use more precise terminology for describing data (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'declined'). The word choice is frequently awkward, which impacts the overall readability of the response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement ('participants are not started', 'this is the only game that raises'), tense usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, and the use of articles and prepositions is inconsistent. There is almost no evidence of complex sentence structures, and the basic structures used are frequently flawed. The lack of control over basic grammar makes the text difficult to follow and significantly lowers the quality of the writing.
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