Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line chart illustrates data about the numbers of the individuals for unique activities at social centre in Melbourne between 2000 and 2020.
It can be observed that in 2000, the highest number with 64 people went to film club. While 35 individuals went to martial arts, 25 people went to amateur dramatics. Table tennis players were accounted for 15. However, after 5 years, there was a decrement in people who went to a film club and martial arts. There was a increment in both amateur and martial arts. Nobody interested in playing musical performances.
It can be seen that in 2010, people visited film club about 60 , whereas individuals visited martial arts increased and reached to 39. Interestingly, both amateur dramatics and table tennis players stood at 20 numbers. Musical performances were risen which was 10. In 2015, there was a sudden increased in the numbers of table tennis players and accounted for 35 and it was overtook martial arts individuals. At the end of period, people visited film club with 60 while table tennis players went to centre with 50 numbers.
In conclusion, although table tennis was the least popular in the beginning, at the end of the period it became famous and stood at the second most visited place.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main trends and making relevant comparisons. You have successfully highlighted the key features, such as the initial popularity of the film club and the significant rise of table tennis. However, the report is slightly let down by some inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, you mention a 'decrement' in martial arts after 5 years, which is not clearly supported by the graph, and there are some inconsistencies in the figures cited. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are accurately transcribed and that the overview clearly synthesizes the most significant trends rather than just listing data points chronologically.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of the data. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'In conclusion' and 'whereas', to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the transition between years feels abrupt. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the data trends.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'illustrates', 'participants', and 'popular'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and incorrect word forms, such as 'decrement' instead of 'decrease', 'increment' instead of 'increase', and 'nobody interested' instead of 'no one was interested'. These errors occasionally impede the precision of your report. To improve, focus on learning the correct collocations for describing trends and ensure you are using the correct parts of speech (nouns vs. verbs) when reporting data changes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses and article usage (e.g., 'table tennis players were accounted for 15', 'Musical performances were risen'). There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and missing prepositions. These errors are noticeable and occur throughout the text. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like missing 'the' or 'a' before nouns and ensuring consistent use of past tense when describing historical data.
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