Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The following line graph illustrates the information regarding the number of participants for different activities at one social centre located in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the number of participants for film club have not changed much but fluctuation can be seen in the number of contestants for martial arts. Furthermore, contestants for amateur dramatics have seen a decline while musical performance and table tennis have seen a incline in participants in the recent years.

Detailed analysis of the graph showcases that the number of participants for film club was recorded to be 65 in 2000. It had seen a slight decline in 2010 reaching 60 contestants but bounced back till 2020 reaching 65. The participants for martial arts has fluctuated throughout the years in which it peaked at 40 participants in 2010 while its lowest number of contestants was recorded to be 30 in 2005. In addition to this, amateur dramatics have seen a significant fall recently only having 5 participants in 2020.

On the other hand, contestants participating in table tennis skyrocketed in 2010 reaching 55 participants in 2020 as there were only 15 table tennis players back in 2000. Although musical performance was only introduced in 2005, the number of participants has been rising reaching 15 in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response effectively covers all requirements of the task. You have identified the main trends and provided relevant data points to support your descriptions. The overview is clear and highlights the key movements across the period. However, to reach a higher band, ensure that comparisons are more explicit; for example, when discussing the 'skyrocketing' table tennis participation, you could directly contrast it with the decline in amateur dramatics to show a more sophisticated synthesis of the data. The information is accurate and the selection of features is appropriate for a summary.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'In addition to this', and 'On the other hand' to guide the reader. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different categories of activities. While the flow is generally smooth, some transitions feel slightly mechanical. To improve, ensure that the referencing is always precise; for instance, ensure that the subject of each sentence is clearly linked to the previous one to maintain a tighter logical progression throughout the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary for the task, including terms like 'fluctuation', 'skyrocketed', and 'significant fall'. There are some minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as using 'contestants' for social centre activities, where 'participants' or 'members' would be more natural. Additionally, you used 'a incline' instead of 'an incline'. While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise control over collocations and articles to reach a higher band level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'Although musical performance was only introduced in 2005, the number of participants has been rising'. There are some grammatical slips, such as subject-verb agreement errors ('the number of participants... have not changed' should be 'has not changed') and article usage ('a incline' should be 'an incline'). Despite these errors, the meaning remains clear throughout. To improve, focus on ensuring subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage when describing historical data.

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