Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph represents the the people's participation in different at one social center in Melbourne, Australia, from the year 200 to 2020.
Overall, many individuals decisions have changed over the two decades; But the number of participants in film club activity had no impact. It is the highest participated activity in every year from 2000 to 2020.
Total there are 5 activities in the social club: Film club, martial arts, armature dramatics, table tennis and musical performance. Film club is the most popular activity, in which every likes to participate. It contains about 60 to 70 members in every year. From 2000 to 2005 there are no participants in musical performance; people started choosing it from 2005 and eventually raised and reached up-to 20 participants in 2020.
There are very few participants in table tennis in the tear 2000, but in 2020 it is the second highest participated activity in 2020 with about 50 participants. Armature dramatics is containing a decent number of participants in 2000, but its popularity is eventually decreased to less than 10 participants in 2020. Even-though Martial arts faced some fluctuation its popularity has not changed over the decades.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main trends and making relevant comparisons. You successfully highlighted the dominance of the film club and the contrasting trends of table tennis and amateur dramatics. However, the overview is slightly weak; stating that the film club had 'no impact' is inaccurate, as the graph shows participation levels. Additionally, some data points are described in a slightly informal or imprecise manner, such as 'every likes to participate'. To reach a higher band, ensure that your overview clearly synthesises the most significant trends rather than just listing observations, and maintain a more formal, objective tone throughout the report.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on specific trends. There is a clear progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally repetitive. For example, the transition 'But the number of participants' is slightly awkward, and the use of 'in which' or 'in the tear' (likely a typo for year) shows limited control over linking phrases. To improve, try to use a wider variety of cohesive devices such as 'consequently', 'in contrast', or 'while' to better connect your sentences and ideas more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to describe trends like 'fluctuation' and 'popularity'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and spelling mistakes, such as 'armature' instead of 'amateur', 'tear' instead of 'year', and 'the the'. These errors occasionally distract the reader. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, relying on basic descriptors. To achieve a higher score, focus on using more precise academic collocations, such as 'witnessed a significant increase' or 'experienced a downward trend', and ensure careful proofreading to eliminate simple spelling and repetition errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'many individuals decisions have changed', 'every likes to participate', and 'is containing'. These errors, along with issues in subject-verb agreement and article usage, occur throughout the text. While they do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to limit the score. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of present continuous versus simple present tenses when describing data trends.
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