Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graph illustrate the number of people who participated in five different activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the fiim club was the most popular activity during the whole period.Table tennis also increased significantly, while amateur dramatics showed a clearly decrease. Martial arts fluctuated, whereas musical performances started from zero and gradually increased.
In 2000, around 65 people participated in the film club, and this number decreased to 60 in 2010. After that, it increased again and reached about 66 participants in 2020. Martial arts had around 36 participants in 2000 and fell to 32 in 2005. Then, it increased again 38 in 2010 before decreaasing to 34 in 2015 and then finishing at 36.
The number of people joining table tennis was about 16 in 2000 and increased to 20 in 2005. It remained the same in 2010, but after this it grew rapidly, reaching 36 in 2015 and approximately 54 in 2020. Musical performances had no participants in 2000 and 2005, but the figure increased to 12 in 2010 and reached around 18 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for all five activities. You successfully identified the most popular activity (film club) and highlighted the significant growth in table tennis. However, the description of amateur dramatics is missing from the body paragraphs despite being mentioned in the overview, which is a minor omission. The data points are generally accurate, though the overview could be more analytical by grouping trends more effectively rather than just listing them. To reach a higher band, ensure that every trend mentioned in the overview is fully supported by data in the body paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Overall', 'In 2000', and 'After that', to guide the reader. However, the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is slightly mechanical. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to show contrast or sequence more naturally. Referencing is generally clear, but ensure that each paragraph focuses on a distinct group of data to improve the overall progression of ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'participated', 'fluctuated', and 'gradually increased'. There are some minor errors, such as 'fiim club' (spelling) and 'clearly decrease' (should be 'clear decrease'). You attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary, but the range is somewhat limited. To improve, try to incorporate more sophisticated synonyms for 'increased' or 'decreased' and ensure that your word choices are grammatically precise (e.g., using adjectives instead of adverbs where appropriate).
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'The line graph illustrate' (subject-verb agreement), 'between 2000 to 2020' (should be 'between 2000 and 2020'), and 'decreaasing' (spelling). Additionally, some sentences lack necessary prepositions, such as 'increased again 38' (should be 'increased again to 38'). While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and preposition usage.
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