Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The give line graph depicts the number of participants participated in different activities at one social centre in Melbourne,Australia during the period of 2000 to 2008.
Overall, most of the participants participated in film club activity.The least number of participants were in an Amateur dramatic activity.
The number of participants in the film club activity were constant throughout the 20 years.There were between 60 to 70 participants in 2000 there was a negligible downfall in 2010 but it got constant afterwards.The number of participants in martial arts were gradual as there were 30 to 40 participants in 2000 the number got fall in 2005 there were 30 participants but there was a increase in 2010 thew number of participants went upto 40,and constant in rest years.Participants in amateur dramatic were adequate in in 2000 and 2005 that were between 20 to 30 and 30 respectively,but the number of participants were continuously falling in 2010,2015 and 2020 they were 20 in 2010 and they were 0 participants in 2020.There were consecutive number off participants in table tennis during 2000,2005 and 2010 they were around 20 but suddenly the number of participants soared upto around 40 in 2015 and in 2020 they were nearly 50.In musical perform ace there were no participants in first five years but the number of participants started increasing 2005,in 2010 there were around 10 participants and there were around 20 participants in 2015 and 2020
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, but there are significant inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, you state the film club was 'constant' throughout 20 years, yet the graph shows fluctuations. You also mention the period 2000 to 2008 in the introduction, while the graph covers 2000 to 2020. While you identify the main trends, the lack of precision in describing the data points and the incorrect time frame limit the score. To improve, ensure you carefully read the axis labels and double-check your data points against the visual information provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes repetitive (e.g., 'there were', 'the number of participants'). There is a lack of sophisticated linking words to connect ideas between sentences. While the progression of information is generally logical, the internal cohesion within paragraphs could be improved by using a wider variety of transition signals to show relationships between the data points.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. You rely heavily on phrases like 'number of participants' and 'there were'. There are also some errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'musical perform ace' and 'thew number'. To reach a higher band, try to use more varied synonyms for 'increase' (e.g., 'climb', 'surge', 'rise') and 'decrease' (e.g., 'decline', 'drop', 'fall') to avoid repetition and demonstrate a more flexible range of vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The number of participants... were constant'), missing articles, and punctuation errors (e.g., missing spaces after periods). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement and punctuation would significantly improve the clarity and accuracy of your writing.
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