Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given glance illustrates information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Firstly, Film club had highest number of participants on social centre in Melbourne, It was around 64 in the 2000.Next year 2005 and 2010 in it was declined and reached 60. However, in the year 2015 and 2020 steadily rose up and reached around 65%. Additionally, number of participants for Martial arts it were fluctuated. it stood about 38 in the year 2000 and from the year 2005 to 2020 it was fluctuated and reached 38.
Secondly, number of participants Amateur dramatics and Table tennis are completed different. Amateur dramatics it stood about 27 in the year 2000 and 2010 in came down. While number of participants for Table tennis at stood about 18 in 2000 and 2020 in reached around 51. However, Musical performances at lowest participants. and over the year increased and 2020 in reached 13.
Overall, number of participants for Film club it is stabled over the year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, but the analysis is inconsistent. While you identify the trends for the Film club and Table tennis, the description of the other activities is vague and lacks sufficient detail. For instance, stating that Martial arts 'fluctuated' without providing specific data points for the intermediate years makes the summary incomplete. Furthermore, there is a significant error in the data interpretation where you mention '65%' for the Film club; the graph shows absolute numbers, not percentages. To improve, ensure you accurately report the units provided in the prompt and provide a more balanced overview of all categories shown in the graph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'Next year 2005 and 2010 in it was declined' are grammatically disjointed and hinder the flow of information. The transition between ideas is sometimes abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'Amateur dramatics it stood about 27'. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'in contrast', 'meanwhile') and ensure that each sentence logically connects to the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic verbs like 'stood' or 'reached'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'The given glance illustrates' (which is not a standard academic opening) and 'it is stabled'. The misuse of '65%' instead of the raw number indicates a lack of precision in reporting data. To improve, you should incorporate a more varied range of vocabulary related to trends, such as 'remained stable', 'experienced a sharp decline', or 'witnessed a gradual increase', and ensure you use the correct terminology for the data provided.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Film club had highest number', 'Martial arts it were fluctuated') and incorrect preposition usage. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'While number of participants for Table tennis at stood about 18 in 2000 and 2020 in reached around 51'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that articles (a/the) are used correctly before nouns.
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