Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The line graph illustrates information about the participants in five different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia, between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, it is evident that table tennis and musical performances showed an upward trend, while amateur dramatics declined over the period. In addition, the film club remained the highest figure for the most of the period, while musical performances recorded the lowest number. The most noticeable change was that table tennis overtook amateur dramatics in 2015.

At the beginning of the period, the figure for table tennis stood at almost 18. It then rose gradually to 20. Between 2005 and 2010, it remained stable at 20. By the end of the period, it had climbed sharply to a peak of 54. Similarly, musical performances started at zero in 2005, before rising to more than 10. However, unlike table tennis, it experienced a more gradual increase, reaching almost 18 by 2020.

Regarding amateur dramatics, its figure was approximately 25 in 2000. Between 2000 and 2005, it rose steadily to almost 28, before falling dramatically to around 8 in 2020. Meanwhile, martial arts followed a different pattern. It showed some fluctuations but remained relatively stable at around 35 over the same period. The film club, on the other hand, stood at more than 60 in 2000, then fell gradually to 60 in 2010 before rising slowly to nearly 67 by 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response effectively covers all requirements of the task. You have identified the main trends and provided a clear overview of the data. The selection of key features, such as the peak for table tennis and the decline in amateur dramatics, is accurate. You have also made relevant comparisons, such as noting when table tennis overtook amateur dramatics. The data is well-supported throughout the body paragraphs. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are described with maximum precision; for instance, ensure the starting points for all categories are clearly identified if they are significant to the overall trend.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5

The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and two distinct body paragraphs. The progression of ideas is smooth, and you have used a range of cohesive devices effectively, such as 'In addition', 'Similarly', 'However', and 'Meanwhile'. Paragraphing is used appropriately to group related information. The referencing is generally clear, and the flow between sentences is natural. The structure supports the reader's understanding of the data without any confusion. This is a well-structured response that demonstrates a good command of organizational features.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You have used a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe trends and figures, such as 'upward trend', 'remained stable', 'climbed sharply', and 'fluctuations'. The word choice is generally precise and appropriate for an academic report. There are no significant errors in spelling or word formation. To improve, you could incorporate more sophisticated collocations or less common lexical items to describe the intensity of changes, such as 'a marginal increase' or 'a significant downturn', which would demonstrate a more flexible range of vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.0

The response demonstrates a good variety of complex structures, such as 'While amateur dramatics declined...' and 'By the end of the period, it had climbed...'. The majority of your sentences are error-free, and your control over punctuation is solid. There are no major grammatical errors that impede communication. The use of tenses is consistent with the requirements of describing past data. To achieve a higher band, you could aim for even greater complexity in sentence construction, perhaps by combining more clauses or using more varied subordinate structures to link data points more fluidly.

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