Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph gives information about the number of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period from 2000 to 2020

The graph show that amateur dramatics remain constant in first two year, then it decrease till the next three year. Table tenis also remain constant three year then it increase two year.

Additionally, the flim club reamin stable from 2000 to 2020 but musical performace start from 2005 and continue increase till the 2020. On the other hand martial arts was also remain stable till 2020.

It is clear from the graph that flim club and martial arts both are same in line graph. The table tenis also rise from 2010 to 2020. On the other side amater dramatics was decrease from 2005 to 2020. At the end, muscial performace was rise from the 2005 to 2020 but 2000 there was not record of the muscial performance.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the task by describing trends, but it fails to provide a clear overview or highlight the most significant features. The description of trends is often inaccurate or confusing, such as stating that 'film club and martial arts both are same' without clarifying their actual values or relative positions. The report lacks a cohesive summary of the main trends (e.g., the overall growth of musical performance versus the decline of amateur dramatics). Furthermore, the data interpretation is inconsistent, and the lack of specific figures or clear comparative language makes it difficult for the reader to follow the trends accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. While there are some attempts at cohesive devices like 'Additionally' and 'On the other hand', they are often used incorrectly or do not logically connect the sentences. The referencing is frequently unclear, and the lack of a logical flow between the description of different activities makes the report feel like a list of disconnected observations rather than a coherent summary. Paragraphing is present but does not effectively group related information.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'flim' for 'film', 'tenis' for 'tennis', 'muscial' for 'musical', and 'amater' for 'amateur'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends with precision; the writer relies on basic verbs like 'remain', 'increase', and 'decrease' without using more sophisticated alternatives or varied collocations. The errors in spelling and word choice are noticeable and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede clarity. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The graph show', 'amateur dramatics remain', 'martial arts was also remain') and tense usage (e.g., 'musical performance start from 2005'). Sentence structures are simple and often repetitive, with little evidence of complex sentence forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly regarding the use of commas and sentence boundaries. These errors are frequent and often distort the intended meaning.

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