Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The line graph illustrates the number of participants in five activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia, from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the film club remained is most popular activity throughout the period while amateur dramatics became less popular. In contrast table tennis recorded the most significant increase in participation.

In 2000, around 64 people attended the film club, compared with 36 participants in martial arts and 26 in amateur dramatics. Film club attendance fell slightly to 60 in 2010 before rising to approximately 66 by 2020. Martial arts figures fluctuated between 32 and 38 participants over the years and ended at about 36.

Amateur dramatics showed a downward trend after 2005, declining from 28 participants to only 6 in 2020. On the other hand, table tennis grew steadily from 16 participants in 2000 to 20 in 2010, then increased sharply to 54 by 2020. Musical performances had no participants in 2000 and 2005 but rose gradually to around 18 participants by the end of the period.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response7.5
Coherence and Cohesion7.5
Lexical Resource6.5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy7.0
Overall7.0

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5

The response effectively covers all requirements of the task. You have identified the main trends, such as the popularity of the film club, the decline of amateur dramatics, and the significant growth in table tennis. The overview is clear and provides a good summary of the overall patterns. Data is used accurately to support the descriptions, and comparisons are made where relevant, such as contrasting the film club with martial arts. The information is well-selected and highlights the most important features of the graph, meeting the criteria for a high band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs that group the activities sensibly. Cohesive devices are used effectively, such as 'In contrast', 'On the other hand', and 'before rising to'. The progression of ideas is smooth, and each paragraph has a clear central topic. The use of referencing is generally accurate, and the paragraphing is appropriate for the task. The flow of information is easy to follow, and the structure supports the overall argument well.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate a good range of vocabulary appropriate for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'declining', 'grew steadily', and 'increased sharply'. The word choice is generally precise and fits the context of a data report. While the vocabulary is functional and accurate, it could be slightly more sophisticated to reach the highest band. For instance, using more varied synonyms for 'participants' or 'activities' would enhance the lexical variety. Overall, the vocabulary is sufficient and used with good control, with no errors that impede communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures effectively. Most sentences are error-free, and the control of grammar is strong. There is a minor error in the second paragraph: 'the film club remained is most popular activity', which should be 'remained the most popular activity'. Aside from this, the punctuation and sentence construction are accurate. The use of time markers and comparative structures is handled well, contributing to the clarity of the report. The grammatical control is consistent throughout the text.

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