Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graph illustrates the information about the number of participants for five different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.

It can be clearly seen that the number of participants in martial arts were 35 in 2000 and a fluctuating trend was experienced throughout the period. The number of participants in amateur dramatics were 25 in 2000. In 2005, a slight increase in participants were observed and reached approximately at 30. Thereafter, there was a steady decline in the number of participants till the year 2020.

Moving further, the musical performances were started in 2005 and the activity experienced a steady growth in the subsequent years and reached to approximately 20 participants in 2020. In 2000, the number of participants in table tennis were 15. In the next 2 years, the participants remained same at 20. After that, there was a significant growth in the number of participants and reached at 55 in the year 2020. The participants in film club activity remained the same at 65 throughout the period except in 2010 where the number of participants witnessed a slight decrease.

Overall, the martial arts activity witnessed a fluctuating trend whereas the film club remained the same and. The amateur dramatics experienced a decline trend while the musical performances showed a gradual growth. The participants in table tennis activity witnessed a substantial growth.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main trends and provided a clear overview of the data. You covered all five activities and included relevant comparisons, such as noting the steady growth of table tennis versus the stability of the film club. However, the report could be improved by grouping the data more effectively rather than describing each activity in isolation. For instance, you could have grouped the activities that showed growth versus those that declined or fluctuated. Additionally, ensure that all data points are accurate; for example, you mentioned martial arts had 35 participants in 2000, but the graph shows a different figure. Focusing on the most significant changes rather than listing every detail will help you achieve a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a summary. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moving further', 'Thereafter', and 'Overall' to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical, and the final sentence of the essay ends abruptly with an incomplete thought ('...remained the same and.'). To improve, ensure that your sentences are complete and that your paragraphing flows more naturally. Using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus will help improve the overall flow and coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly, using terms like 'fluctuating trend', 'steady growth', and 'substantial growth'. There are some minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'the musical performances were started' (passive voice is unnecessary here) and 'decline trend' (should be 'downward trend'). You also repeat the phrase 'number of participants' frequently. To reach a higher band, try to use synonyms or vary your sentence structure to avoid repetition. Incorporating more precise reporting verbs and nouns will demonstrate a more sophisticated command of the language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the number of participants in martial arts were' should be 'was') and preposition usage (e.g., 'reached approximately at 30' should be 'reached approximately 30'). Additionally, there are some awkward phrasings, such as 'the musical performances were started'. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions. Increasing your use of error-free complex sentences will also help you move up the band scale.

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