Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the number of people contribution for different activities at one social center in melbourne between 1960 to 2020.
Overall, Fim club had the highest number of participants at the beginning of the period. while musical performances an overall decline.In contrast,another three activitites had fluctuated in the given year.
In 2000, flim club was the largest sector, with approximately 65 activities on social centre.material arts was accounted for 35 percent contributor which is the second sector to students invole this activity.The most nocitely things in 2000 musical performances have no played in soical center. Moveover, table tennis contributor near to 15 percent and amateur dramatics accounted for 25 percent were member involue this endeavors
From 2005 onwards, flim club declined , falling from 62 percent to around 60% in 2010 and rise up to the same starting point 65% in 2020. By contrast, table tennis continued to grow, reaching approximately 16 million jobs at the end of the period. Material arts also fluctuated at the end of the period. Amateur dramatics remained relatively stable at about 28% between 2005and 2010 before declining further to around 3 %in 2020.Musical performances started to 2005 and climb up 12% in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, but there are significant issues with data accuracy and interpretation. You frequently misinterpret the units (e.g., referring to '65 activities' or '16 million jobs' when the graph likely represents percentages or participant numbers). The overview is present but lacks clarity due to grammatical errors. While you attempt to compare the activities, the confusion regarding the data points makes it difficult to follow the trends accurately. To improve, ensure you carefully read the axes and labels of the graph before writing, and focus on reporting the most significant trends rather than listing every data point.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical flow is often disrupted by awkward phrasing and mechanical errors. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'In contrast' and 'By contrast', but they are sometimes applied incorrectly or in a repetitive manner. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it hard to track which activity you are discussing. To improve, focus on using transition words more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'flim' for 'film', 'soical' for 'social', 'nocitely' for 'noticeably') and incorrect word choices (e.g., 'material arts' instead of 'martial arts', 'involue' instead of 'involved'). These errors occasionally impede communication, as the reader has to guess your intended meaning. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your range of vocabulary related to describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a sharp decline', and ensure you use them in the correct context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('musical performances an overall decline'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. Sentence structures are often simple or fragmented, and there is a lack of complex sentence control. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the persistent errors require the reader to exert effort. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement will significantly improve your score.
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