Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the information about the preference of doing five various activities namely: film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis, and musical performances by participants at Australia's one social center in Melbourne between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, it is evident that the trend for tennis table and martial performances increased significantly over the period, while the number of participants for amateur dramatics dipped dramatically. Moreover, it shows fluctuations for the number of participants for both film club and martial arts throughout the period.
In 2000, the number of participants was nearly 62 and 38 for film club and martial arts respectively, the number slightly dropped for each activity to around 60 and 31 in 2005. Subsequently, the figure for film club decreased to about 79 in 2010, whereas the figure for martial arts rose marginally to approximately 40. Afterward, the trend for film club rose minimally to roughly 68 in 2020. In contrast, the trend for martial arts decreased slightly to nearly 39.
The trend for amateur dramatics declined from around 28 in 2000 to 18 in 2010. However, table tennis trend climbed slightly from approximately 18 in 2000 to 20 in 2010. Further, the number of participants for amateur dramatics decreased gradually to around 5 in 2020, whereas tennis table trend peaked at around 55 in 2020. Additionally, it showed that the number participants started in 2005, it rose significantly to 10 in 2010, it peaked at around 12 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have successfully identified the main trends and provided relevant data points to support your descriptions. However, there are significant inaccuracies in your data reporting. For instance, you state the film club figure decreased to 79 in 2010, but the graph shows it was significantly lower. Additionally, you mention 'musical performances' in your introduction, but this category is not present in the graph provided. While you cover all categories, the misinterpretation of the data points and the inclusion of an incorrect category prevent a higher score. Ensure you double-check the axes and labels before writing your summary.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and you use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Subsequently', and 'In contrast' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally disrupted by repetitive sentence structures and some awkward phrasing. The final paragraph is particularly disjointed, as it introduces a new category ('musical performances' implied or mislabeled) without clear transition or context. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus rather than jumping between different activities.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuations', 'marginally', and 'gradually'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'preference of doing' instead of 'preference for' and 'martial performances' which is not a standard term for the activity shown. There is also some repetition of the word 'trend' and 'figure'. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise synonyms and ensure that your collocations are natural and accurate in the context of describing statistical data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. For example, 'the number participants started in 2005' is missing a preposition, and 'tennis table trend' should be 'the table tennis trend'. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage throughout the text. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall clarity of your report. Focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy, particularly regarding articles and prepositions.
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