Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph compared the number of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Overall it can be seen that, the film club is the most popular in among five years. the least popular Musical performance due to it not initiate.
To commence, on account, of 65 people are taking participants in the activity like Film club owing to it was beginning in 2000 and the most sharp rise in 2020. However, the Material arts also 38 number were been hiking in one social center and in five period of year they remain stable and taking part in many activity on it.
on the other hand, majority of Table tennis was remain constant until the 2010 and after it was climb to till 2020. vis-a-vis, all the five only one Amateur dramatics was a diminished in one center. Therefore, many category were been increment but only one will decline among all year. Finally, the Musical performances not only it was not start in 2000 but also in 2005 the musical performance were been raising on it.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task by summarizing the main features of the graph. However, the analysis is significantly hindered by unclear reporting of data. For instance, the statement '65 people are taking participants' is confusing, and the description of trends is often inaccurate or difficult to follow, such as the claim that 'many category were been increment'. While the response identifies some trends, the lack of precision in reporting figures and the failure to clearly compare the activities across the 20-year period mean that the main features are not effectively highlighted. The overview is also somewhat vague and lacks a clear summary of the overall trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing and grammatical errors. While some cohesive devices are used, such as 'To commence', 'on the other hand', and 'Finally', they are often used incorrectly or do not serve to connect ideas smoothly. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of the information. The paragraphing is present but does not effectively group related ideas, leading to a disjointed reading experience.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is limited and often used inaccurately, which impedes communication. Phrases like 'taking participants', 'most sharp rise', and 'were been hiking' demonstrate a lack of control over collocations and word forms. There is a reliance on basic vocabulary, and attempts to use more complex structures or terminology result in errors that make the meaning unclear. The student struggles to express trends precisely, using terms like 'increment' and 'decline' in ways that do not fit the context of the data provided.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often obscure the intended meaning. There are significant issues with verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Examples include 'the film club is the most popular in among five years' and 'many category were been increment'. The use of complex sentence structures is attempted but consistently results in errors, such as 'not only it was not start in 2000 but also in 2005 the musical performance were been raising on it'. These persistent errors make the text difficult to read and understand.
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