Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph illustrate the number of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the numbers of participants in different activities increased over the time period except amateur dramatics, there are almost 25 participants in the period 2000 and declined over the period 2020 at 5 participants, while in table tennis participants are less then amateur dramatics in the period 2000 but saw a steady rise from the period 2010 and finished around 55 participants at the period 2020.
Moreover, participants in film club activity almost same in the period 2000 to 2020 and in the martial arts activity participants had rise and down zigzag but in the end same around 38 participants in this activity . Although, there was no participants in musical performances in the period 2000 and towards but later increased in the period 2005 until 2020 at almost 20 participants.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response provides a summary of the main features of the graph. You have identified the key trends, such as the decline in amateur dramatics and the growth in table tennis and musical performances. However, the report lacks a clear, distinct overview paragraph, which is essential for a high band score. While you mention some data points, the description of the trends is occasionally imprecise, such as describing the martial arts trend as a 'zigzag' rather than using more formal analytical language. To improve, ensure you clearly group the data into logical categories and provide a concise summary of the overall trends in the introduction or as a separate paragraph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally awkward, such as the use of 'Although' at the start of the final sentence, which does not fit the context. The progression of ideas is generally logical, but the transitions between sentences could be smoother. The referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when discussing the time periods. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear focus would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety expected at higher bands. You rely on basic descriptors like 'increased', 'declined', and 'same'. Phrases such as 'rise and down zigzag' are informal and not suitable for an academic report. To achieve a higher score, you should incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to data trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a significant growth'. Additionally, ensure that you use collocations correctly; for instance, 'at the period 2020' is incorrect and should be 'in 2020'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
There are several grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, such as 'The graph illustrate' instead of 'illustrates'. There are also issues with preposition usage, for example, 'in the period 2000' should be 'in 2000' or 'during the period 2000-2020'. The sentence structures are mostly simple or compound, with limited use of complex sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and refining your use of prepositions. Increasing the variety of complex sentence structures will also help demonstrate a wider grammatical range.
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