Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the number of people participating in different activities at one centre in Melbourne, Australia over the period of 20 years.
Overall, Film club remained at the top through out the period where as Amateur dramatics dramatically decreased and end up at the lowest number of participants.
Looking at the graph, In 2000 Film club had roughly 64 participants it remained the same throughout 20 years except in 2020 there was a dip. There was no participant of musical performances in the start of 2000 but the number of participants started increasing from 2015 to 2020 about 16 participants.
In 2025 Table tennis slightly incereased to 20 then it dramatically rose up to almost 50 and ended up at the second highest activity
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you identified the main trends, the analysis is incomplete. You missed describing the 'Amateur dramatics' trend in detail and failed to provide a comprehensive comparison of all categories. The data points mentioned are sometimes inaccurate (e.g., mentioning 2025 when the graph ends in 2020). To improve, ensure you cover all categories shown in the graph and provide a more thorough summary of the data points, ensuring you meet the length requirement to allow for full development of your ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is limited and somewhat mechanical. Transitions between sentences are sparse, making the flow feel a bit disjointed. For example, the jump between the overview and the body paragraphs could be smoother. To reach a higher band, try using a wider variety of linking words and phrases (e.g., 'In contrast,' 'Furthermore,' 'Subsequently') to connect your ideas more logically and improve the overall progression of your report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'participating,' 'dramatically decreased,' and 'remained the same.' However, there are some spelling errors, such as 'incereased,' and some word choice issues, such as 'end up at' and 'in the start of.' The vocabulary is generally functional but lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. To improve, focus on using more academic collocations and ensure you proofread for spelling errors to avoid distracting the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'where as' (should be 'whereas'), 'end up' (tense inconsistency), and 'There was no participant' (should be plural 'participants'). Additionally, punctuation is inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tenses will help improve your accuracy significantly.
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