Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the number of people participating in different activities at one centre in Melbourne, Australia over the period of 20 years.
Overall, Film club remained at the top through out the period whereas Amateur dramatics dramatically decreased and ended at the lowest number of participants.
Looking at the graph, in 2000 Film club had roughly 64 participants. it remained the same throughout 20 years except in 2020 there was a dip. There was no participant of musical performances in the start of 2000 but the number of participants started increasing from 2015 to 2020 to 16 participants.
In 2025 Table tennis slightly increased to 20 then it dramatically rose up to almost 50 and ended up at the second highest activity through out the 20 years. While Martial art number of participants were about 35 in 2000 but fluctuated throughout the year and ended up at the same number after 20 years.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, identifying the trends for the different activities. However, there are significant inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, you state that Table tennis increased in 2025, which is outside the provided timeframe of 2000–2020. Additionally, the description of the Film club as remaining the same throughout the period is not entirely accurate, as the graph shows fluctuations. While you have attempted to select and report main features, the lack of precision in data interpretation and the inclusion of incorrect dates (2025) hinder the overall task achievement. To improve, ensure you carefully read the axes and data points before writing.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. There is a clear progression of ideas, and you use some cohesive devices such as 'whereas', 'while', and 'in addition'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the transition between the description of Table tennis and Martial arts. The paragraphing is sufficient, but the flow between sentences could be improved by using more varied linking words to connect the trends more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to describe trends using terms like 'dramatically decreased', 'fluctuated', and 'rose up'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'no participant of musical performances' (should be 'no participants in musical performances') and 'at the start of 2000'. You rely on some repetitive phrasing. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary to describe data trends, such as 'remained stable', 'experienced a decline', or 'reached a plateau'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'it remained the same' (starting with a lowercase 'i'), 'there was no participant of musical performances', and 'Martial art number of participants were'. These errors are frequent enough to be noticeable but do not generally impede communication. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent capitalization. Additionally, try to vary your sentence structure further by using more complex clauses to describe the relationships between the different data sets.
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