Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The graph illustrates the data on various participants from Melbourne, Australia prefer different leisure activities on social media for the period of 2000 to 2020.

Overall, Film clubs were dominate over two decades, along with Table tennis which segment expanded significantly. Amateur dramatics had a dramatic fall.

Film clubs were prevalent in 2000 had 65 users which significantly increased in 2020 and gained dominance over other by reaching 70 in 2020. However, the trend of Table tennis rose sharply from 2010 which had 20 user and stood at over 50 by the year 2020. Additionally, the users of Martial arts in Melbourne were fluctuating in 40 year period in between 30 to 35, reached to 40 by the year 2020.

While the number of Amateur dramatics plunged from 2005 to 2020 which had 30 to 5 users, Musical performances increased marginally in 2020. Furthermore, the trend of musical performances started from 2005 in Australia.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the graph, identifying the trends for the various activities. However, there are inaccuracies in the reporting of data. For instance, you state that Martial Arts fluctuated between 30 and 35, whereas the graph shows it starting at 30 and ending at 40, with a different trajectory. Additionally, the mention of 'social media' is an error as the prompt refers to a 'social centre'. While the main trends are identified, the lack of precision in data reporting and the misinterpretation of the context prevent a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use some cohesive devices such as 'However', 'Additionally', and 'While' to link ideas. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is occasionally mechanical. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the sentence 'gained dominance over other by reaching 70 in 2020', where the comparison is incomplete. Improving the flow between sentences would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'prevalent', 'fluctuating', 'plunged', and 'marginally'. However, there are noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'Film clubs were dominate' (should be 'dominant') and 'segment expanded' (which is slightly awkward in this context). The misuse of 'social media' instead of 'social centre' also impacts the lexical accuracy. To improve, focus on using words in their correct grammatical form and ensuring they fit the specific context of the data provided.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'Film clubs were prevalent in 2000 had 65 users' (missing a relative pronoun or conjunction) and 'the trend of Table tennis rose sharply from 2010 which had 20 user' (should be 'users'). Subject-verb agreement and pluralisation issues are present throughout the text. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to suggest a need for more careful proofreading of basic sentence construction.

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