Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph illustrates the number of competitors at social centre who took part from Melbourne, Australia during the period from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, it shows the various kinds of social activities like film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performance. The main fluctuation is in table tennis which rose up dramatically from 2010.
Looking first at the musical performance which started at 2005 at zero numbers of participants and ended up making almost 15 numbers of attendees. Similarly, table tennis had almost 18 numbers of individuals at the beginning and suddenly in 2010 huge numbers of people take part and reached above 50.
Moreover, in amateur dramatics we can see the downfall at numbers of participants who had just started at 25 peoples in initial phase which goes down from 2005 and touch around 5 volunteers. Likewise, in martial arts which started its participants at around 38 and shows some zigzag movements over the period. Subsequently, in film club it shows the same flow which started at 65 numbers of respondents in 2000 and finished at almost same numbers.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main trends for each activity. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, the description of 'musical performance' and 'table tennis' lacks precision in reporting the data points, and the term 'huge numbers' is imprecise for an academic report. While the main features are highlighted, the comparison between categories could be more effectively integrated rather than listing them activity by activity. The overview is present but could be more analytical regarding the overall shifts in participation across the centre.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into logical paragraphs, each focusing on specific activities. Cohesive devices such as 'Looking first at', 'Moreover', and 'Likewise' are used to guide the reader. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the final paragraph where 'same flow' is used to describe the film club's trend without clearly linking it to the previous context. Paragraphing is used appropriately, but the internal progression of ideas within paragraphs could be smoother.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There is a reliance on basic phrasing such as 'numbers of participants' and 'huge numbers of people'. Some word choices are unnatural, such as 'competitors' (the prompt refers to participants) and 'zigzag movements'. There are also minor errors in word form and collocation, such as 'downfall at numbers' instead of 'decline in the number of'. To reach a higher band, the student should use more precise reporting verbs and nouns related to data trends.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'took part from Melbourne' (should be 'at a social centre in Melbourne'), 'at zero numbers of participants' (should be 'at zero participants'), and '25 peoples' (should be '25 people'). Subject-verb agreement and preposition usage are inconsistent throughout the text. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the frequency of these errors prevents the response from achieving a higher band score.
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