Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The provided graph compares the number of volunteers who participated in different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the maximum participation observed in film club section and minimum was in music section. However, the count of participants in table tennis and Amateur dramatics remained same in 2010.

To begin with, from 2000 to 2020, the counts of participants range from 60-70 was observed in film club. In Martial Arts, the fluctuation in the participation was seen, 36 people took part in this activity in 2000, followed by 38 participants in 2010 and 37 in 2020.

Moving further, 26 volunteers took part in Amateur dramatics, while 16 was interested in Table tennis in 2000. In year 2010, the number of participants remained same almost 20 in both these activities. However, the abrupt decline was seen in the counts of Amateur dramatics and fell upto 4 in 2020, the counts of table tennis volunteers was surged upto 50 by year 2020. In Musical performances, from 2000 to 2005 there was no participation observed, but within next three years 15 people showed interest in the performances.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features of the graph, such as the overall trends and the relative popularity of the activities. However, the report lacks precision in data reporting. For example, you state that participation in the film club ranged from 60-70, but the graph shows a more specific trend. Additionally, your description of the 2010 data for table tennis and amateur dramatics is slightly inaccurate based on the visual evidence. To improve, ensure that you provide more precise data points and avoid vague phrasing like 'remained same almost 20'. A clearer overview of the most significant changes would also strengthen your response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organized into paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on specific activities. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To begin with' and 'Moving further' to guide the reader. However, the transition between ideas is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence regarding the 2010 data where the connection between the two activities is slightly confusing. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus will help improve the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information, using terms like 'fluctuation', 'abrupt decline', and 'surged'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'film club section' (which is redundant) and 'the counts of table tennis volunteers was surged' (incorrect verb form). While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the response from reaching a higher band. To improve, focus on using more precise terminology for describing trends and ensure that your verb forms match the subjects they describe.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'minimum was in music section' (missing article), 'remained same' (missing 'the'), and 'fell upto 4' (incorrect preposition usage). Additionally, there are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'the counts... was surged'. While these errors are noticeable, they rarely impede the reader's understanding of the data. To reach a higher band, focus on consistent use of articles, correct preposition usage, and ensuring that your verb tenses are used accurately when describing past trends.

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