Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The line graph illustrates the number of participants for five different activities such as film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia in between 2000 and 2020. Overall, it is clear that, film club and martial arts had relatively stable participants in initial and last year. Consequently, the number of participants in table amateure dramatics declined after 2005. However, table tennis and musical performances witnessed considerably similar trends with each other throughout the given period. In detail, in the beginning of the year, the film club had nearly 65 participants, while this figure remained relatively stable among all the years. Though, the number of participants in martial arts fluctuated throughout the given years, the figure stood at 35 in 2000 and 2020. Furthermore, the number of participants in amateur dramatics was 25 in the year 2000, the number plummeted drastically after the year 2005 and reached at 5 over the two decades. By contrast, table tennis and musical performance considerably shows similar trends. In 2000, table tennis had 15 participants in the 2000, however, this figure rose to 55 in last year. Likewise, musical performances had 0 participants in the first year, after twenty year, the number of participants increased significantly to 15.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response covers all five activities and provides a clear overview of the trends. You successfully identified the main features, such as the stability of the film club and the dramatic decline in amateur dramatics. However, the report could be improved by more precise data reporting. For instance, stating 'in the beginning of the year' is vague; it should specify 'in 2000'. Additionally, the comparison between table tennis and musical performances is accurate, but the description of the trends could be more analytical by grouping the activities based on their performance (e.g., those that increased versus those that declined or remained stable).

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. You use a range of cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'In detail', 'Furthermore', and 'By contrast' to guide the reader. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical or misused, such as 'Consequently' at the start of the second sentence, which does not logically follow the previous statement. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the overview from the specific data points. The progression of ideas is generally clear, though the flow between sentences could be smoother with more varied linking phrases.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuated', 'plummeted', and 'significantly'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'considerably similar trends' (which is slightly redundant) and 'in the beginning of the year' (when referring to a decade-long period). Spelling is generally accurate, though 'amateure' is misspelled. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise academic collocations and avoid repetitive phrasing when describing trends.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors that slightly impede the flow, such as 'in between 2000 and 2020' (the 'in' is unnecessary), 'reached at 5' (should be 'reached 5'), and 'in the 2000' (the article is incorrect). Additionally, 'musical performance considerably shows' should be plural to match the subject. While these errors do not prevent understanding, they occur frequently enough to limit the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions will help improve your accuracy.

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