Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrate the information about the participants numbers for different activities at a social center in Melbourne, Australia between 200 to 2020.
Overall, film club had largest participants and musical performances had lowest. Table tennis participants were initially less in number but their strength increased gradually, while the number of participants in martial arts remained relatively stable throughout the period. Only Amateur dramatics are those participants who decreased at the end of 2020.
Among all the participants, film club remained largest and stable in numbers from 200 to 2020. On the other hands, musical performances were least in number who were starting from 2005 and gradually increased to 15 at 2020. Table tennis were 15 in 2000 and sharply increased to 50 at the end of 2020. Martial arts were remained 40 during the whole period with small changes. Amateur dramatics was the only activity to experience who fall in numbers from 15 to 5 in 2020.
In conclusion, the graph provides the information how the number of participants for different activities at a social center in Melbourne changed over time period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for each activity. You successfully identified the highest and lowest participants and noted the changes over time. However, the overview is slightly repetitive, and some data points are described with minor inaccuracies (e.g., stating the film club was 'stable' when it shows slight fluctuations). To reach a higher band, ensure that the overview highlights the most significant trends rather than just listing individual activities. The data selection is generally accurate, but ensure that comparisons are more explicit to demonstrate a clear understanding of the relationships between the different categories.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the general trends from the specific data points. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'and' or 'in'. Some transitions between sentences feel abrupt. To improve, try using a wider variety of linking words and phrases (e.g., 'In contrast,' 'Conversely,' 'Furthermore,' or 'As for...') to create a smoother flow of information between your ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information, using terms like 'gradually increased,' 'sharply increased,' and 'relatively stable.' However, there are several word-choice errors and awkward phrasings, such as 'their strength increased' (referring to participants) and 'experience who fall in numbers.' These errors occasionally hinder the precision of your writing. To achieve a higher score, focus on using more natural collocations and ensure that your vocabulary is used in the correct grammatical context. Avoid repeating the same structures when describing trends.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('The line graph illustrate,' 'Martial arts were remained') and incorrect preposition usage ('at 2020' instead of 'in 2020'). Additionally, there are tense inconsistencies and awkward phrasing that affect the clarity of your sentences. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage.
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