Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The chart below provides information on the digital amount of participants for several activities at a certain social centre in Melbourne , Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Overall, its clearly shown that several individuals participated in the film club the most than others through out the given period , table tennis was at a decline in 2000 -2005 , but quickly plummted from [redacted phone] wheras the statistics of martial arts somewhat varies along the given period , , amateur dramatics was at its peak in 2005 but quickly plunged after whilst musical performances didnt have parcipants from [redacted phone], but slowly rose soon after .
In details ,over 60 number of participants were in the film club in 2000 with 37 numbers of particpants in martials following shortly after , below 30 number of participants for dramatics and below 20 for table tennis . In 2005, the cahr
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the response. While you have attempted to identify main features, the report is incomplete; it cuts off abruptly in the second paragraph, meaning the data for the latter half of the period is missing. To reach a higher band, you must ensure all parts of the task are addressed, including a complete overview and a full description of the data trends. The current lack of completion prevents a thorough comparison of the activities over the full 20-year period.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into two paragraphs, but the structure is compromised by the incomplete nature of the text. While there is an attempt at an overview, the transition between the introduction and the body is abrupt. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Overall' and 'In details', but the flow is hindered by punctuation errors, such as the double commas and the lack of proper sentence boundaries. The progression of ideas is interrupted by the unfinished final sentence, which prevents a logical conclusion to the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and contains several inaccuracies. Phrases like 'digital amount of participants' are unnatural; 'number of participants' would be more appropriate. There are also spelling errors such as 'plummted' (plummeted), 'wheras' (whereas), 'parcipants' (participants), and 'cahr' (chart). While you have attempted to use some descriptive verbs like 'plunged' and 'varied', the overall range is restricted, and the frequent spelling mistakes occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the intended meaning.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation. For example, 'its clearly shown' should be 'it is clearly shown', and 'musical performances didnt have parcipants' lacks the necessary apostrophe. The sentence structure is often disjointed, and the misuse of commas creates run-on sentences. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of grammatical slips and punctuation errors prevents the text from achieving a higher band score.
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