Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph illustrates the number of people participating at one social centre conducting various activities in capital of Australia over the period between 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the number of participants in film club experienced a peak among other activities, Whereas the drama activity recorded the lowest.Although music has the lowest at the start.
The number of participants in Film club had highest at the start, but declined slightly from around 65 in 2000 to around 60 in 2005 before reaching to 60 in 2010, then experienced a constant growth to 65 in 2015 and above 65 at the end.Similarly participants in Martial arts experienced constant up and downs from around 35 from start to around 35 at the end. Wheras the participating number in Amateur drama activities is rose from 25 in 2000 to around 30 in 2005, which then declined rapidly to ,20,15,5 in 2010,2015 and 2020 respectively.
By contrast, the number of people in Table tennis rose steadily from 15 in 2000 to around 20 in 2010 and remained same till 2010, which experienced its peak growth to around 40 in 2015 and ove 50 at the end.Similarly the number of people in musical activities rose significantly from 0 in 2005 to above 10 in 2010 and around 15 in 2015, before reaching its peak to 20 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for all activities. You successfully identified the main trends and made relevant comparisons, such as noting the decline in drama and the growth in table tennis. However, there are some inaccuracies in the data reporting; for instance, you mentioned music started at 0 in 2005, but the graph shows it starting at 0 in 2000. Additionally, the overview is slightly disjointed and contains a factual error regarding the drama activity being the lowest at the start, when the graph shows music was lower. Improving the precision of data extraction would elevate your score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'Similarly', and 'By contrast' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by awkward phrasing and punctuation errors, such as the list '20,15,5' and the run-on sentence structure in the second paragraph. The use of referencing is sometimes unclear, and the transition between sentences could be smoother to improve the overall progression of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'experienced a peak', 'constant growth', and 'rose steadily'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and minor errors, such as 'conducting various activities in capital of Australia' (which is factually incorrect as Melbourne is not the capital) and 'up and downs'. Some phrasing is repetitive, and the lack of articles (e.g., 'in Film club') occasionally affects the naturalness of the writing. Expanding your range of collocations would help you achieve a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'the drama activity is rose' (incorrect verb tense/passive voice usage) and 'remained same till 2010'. There are also issues with comma placement and missing articles throughout the text. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher level of grammatical control.
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