Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustrates information on the number of participants for a variety of activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Overall, the highest number of participants was reported in the film club, for the entire period. The club had almost 70 members. However, the number dropped slightly below 60, until year 2010, after which it increased steadily. On the other hand, Musical Performances had almost no participants until year 2005. Moreover, the activities of Martial Arts, and Amateur Dramatics had fluctuations in the number of participants, over the years. However, the participants of Table Tennis increased sharply since 2010, from 20 to almost, 60 members after slight fluctuations in the years, previously. In contrast, the number of participants in Amateur Dramatics declined sharply from nearly 20 to Almost, zero participants for the period [redacted phone]. Therefore, the number of people in musical performance improved slightly towards 15 and continued to rise until 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the film club's dominance and the trends for table tennis and amateur dramatics. However, the overview is somewhat limited, and the report lacks a clear, cohesive summary of the overall trends. While you have selected key data points, the analysis is slightly disjointed. To improve, ensure you group the information more logically—for example, by comparing the activities that grew versus those that declined—rather than listing them activity by activity. Additionally, ensure all data points mentioned are accurate according to the graph to avoid misrepresenting the information.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into a single block of text, which makes it difficult to follow. IELTS Academic Task 1 responses should be structured into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs for detailed analysis. While you use some cohesive devices like 'However', 'Moreover', and 'In contrast', the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical. The lack of paragraphing significantly impacts the logical progression of your ideas. Using clear paragraph breaks will help the reader navigate your report much more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuations', 'increased steadily', and 'declined sharply'. However, there are some issues with word choice and punctuation, such as the unnecessary comma in 'almost, 60' and 'Almost, zero'. The vocabulary is functional but lacks the variety and precision required for higher bands. To improve, try to incorporate more sophisticated synonyms for 'increased' or 'decreased' and ensure that your punctuation does not interrupt the flow of your sentences.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'until year 2010' (should be 'until 2010' or 'until the year 2010') and 'the participants of Table Tennis' (should be 'participation in Table Tennis'). Additionally, the use of articles is inconsistent. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the main points, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall fluency. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles will help improve your accuracy.

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