Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given linegraph shows the members in a social centre in Melbourne, Australia perticipating in different activities from year 2000 to 2020. The detailed summery of the graph will be given in the following paragraph.

There are total 5 activities. The most popular activity of the time was film club. It is because the highest number of membership through the time. It just slightly decreased in the year 2010, where it reached 60 members. The membership of martial arts was fluctuating between 30 to 35 through the time. It was almost constant. The amateur dramatics club was not much popular initially, it became the most unpopular activity till the year 2020. The table tennis club was having the lowest membership initially, but it got a significant growth in it's membership and became the second popular activity of the perticular social centre in the year 2020. The musical performances club didn't had and members initially. It started getting membership from the year 2010. It reached its highest membership till the year 2020, which was 16 members.

Overall the flim club was seen to be the most popular activity in the perticular centre throughout the time. Where as membership of martial arts was at the moderateside and was almost constant. The musical performances club was overall having the least membership of all.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for the five activities. You successfully identified the most popular activity (film club) and noted the significant growth of the table tennis club. However, the overview is somewhat weak; while you mention the film club and martial arts, you miss the opportunity to highlight the overall trend of growth across most activities. Additionally, some data points are slightly inaccurate or vague, such as describing the musical performances as having 'no members' initially when the graph shows a clear starting point. To improve, ensure your overview synthesizes the main trends rather than just listing individual activity details.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive. For example, you frequently start sentences with 'It' or 'The membership of'. There is a lack of varied linking words to connect ideas within and between sentences. While the progression of ideas is generally clear, the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is a bit abrupt. Using a wider range of cohesive devices, such as 'consequently', 'in contrast', or 'subsequently', would improve the flow and logical connection of your points.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the main points, such as 'significant growth', 'fluctuating', and 'popular'. However, there are several spelling errors, such as 'linegraph', 'perticipating', 'summery', 'perticular', and 'flim'. These errors are frequent enough to be noticeable. Furthermore, your word choice is sometimes imprecise, such as saying 'most unpopular activity' instead of 'least popular'. To reach a higher band, focus on accurate spelling and using more sophisticated collocations to describe trends, such as 'experienced a steady decline' or 'witnessed a sharp increase'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'There are total 5 activities' (missing article), 'didn't had and members' (incorrect verb tense and article usage), and 'it's membership' (incorrect use of apostrophe). Subject-verb agreement and article usage are inconsistent throughout the text. While these errors rarely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to limit the score. To improve, pay closer attention to basic grammar rules, particularly verb tenses when describing past data and the correct use of articles with nouns.

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